IELTS Task 2- explain some of the ways in humans are damaging the environment. what can government do to address these problem? what can individual people do? [closed]

Question

 

Nowadays, environmental disasters appear more frequent and stronger than ever. these happen because humans have harmed the environment problems and suggest some solutions that governments and individuals should carry out to protect their environment.

to begin with, reforestation and air pollution are two of the biggest problems that greatly affect the environment. thousands of forest are cleared to fulfill human fulfillment such thing as accommodation, heat and new farming land. this activity may have a devastating effect on the planet in the future. when it comes to air pollution, it is likely that  there are vehicle exhaust fumes and gas emissions from factories which can lead to global warming.

if we want to prevent these threats from becoming an even bigger problem in the future then governments need to increase public awareness. for example, authorities would organize a tree growing festival for their community and address the environment impact. moreover, governments have to raise fund for environmental projects. by supporting a certain research, a modern public transport can be used to reduce a number of cars on streets. factories would use a sophisticated machine to limit emission.

individual should also be responsible for the impact they have on environment. Firstly, they can take public transport instead of private cars. Secondly, saving electricity is one of suitable things that they can help to protect the environment. finally, it is helpful to use recycled products as much as possible.

in conclusion, both governments and individuals must play a crucial role in protect our environment.  ct the environment. finally, it is helpful to use recycled products as much as possible.

in conclusion, both governments and individuals must play a crucial role in protect our environment.

Answer 1

Nowadays, environmental disasters appear more frequently and strongly than ever. these happen because humans have caused the environment problems and suggest some solutions that the Government and the individuals should carry out to protect our environment.

to begin with, reforestation and air pollution are two of the biggest problems that greatly affect the environment. thousands of forest are cleared to fulfill human requirements such thing as accommodation, heat and new farming land. this activity may have a devastating effect on the planet in the future. when it comes to air pollution, it is likely that  there are  fumes exhausted from vehicles and gas emissions from factories which can lead to global warming.

if we want to prevent these threats from becoming an even bigger problems in the future then the government need to increase public awareness. for example, authorities would organize a tree growing festival for community and address the environment impacts. moreover, the government have to raise fund for environmental projects. by supporting a certain research, a modern public transport can be used to reduce a number of cars on streets. factories would use a sophisticated machine to limit emission.

individuals should also be responsible for the impact they have on the environment. Firstly, they can take public transports instead of private cars. Secondly, saving electricity is one of suitable things that they can help to protect the environment. finally, it is helpful to use recycled products as much as possible.

in conclusion, both the government and individuals must play a crucial role in protecting our environment finally, it is helpful to use recycled products as much as possible.

 

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i think your essay need more examples and scenarios to make it more attractive...besides, you should level up your grammar structures , such as: inverted sentence, relatives ... :) 

Comments

Thank you so much Loan.
Nhung public transport ko co "s" vi la uncountable n
Ah cho mình hỏi tai sao cho frequent lại dung adv cho này mình dùng so sánh hơn mà

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à, tại bạn dùng là " appear " nên S + V + more + Adv + than ak :)
adv vẫn dùng so sánh hơn được, với do bổ nghĩa cho appear nên dùng Adv đúng òi
Thân!

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Thank you thanh Loan so much.
I will keep it in mind