The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars?

Question

Over the past few decades, with the rapid development of car use, which has led to a huge number of danger issues for human beings. While some people suggest that the government should enact a strict law to restrict use of cars, I would argue that it is not a good option to tackle the problem.

The difficulties associated with frequent car use are becoming increasingly familiar to the general public. Firstly, vehicles are major source which releases a vast amount of toxic gas to environment. Specifically, carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide are  created in operating of internal combustion engine, which causes global warming or does a detriment to human health such as acid rain, greenhouse and gas emission. Moreover, traffic jams also is another challenge should be resolved as soon as possible. As more and more citizens drive their own cars to work  than cycle or take public transportation, there are very heavy traffic jams almost every day at rush time.

So as to solve the problem, some people propose that the authority should impose a strict restriction on use of cars, nevertheless, I personally do not think I will be an effective way. To reinforce the point, this method likely reduce mobility for people and decline car industry that impact on human civilization. Instead, the government should encourage car manufacturers to design more environmentally friendly outcomes, which run on solar power or hydrogen. Also, traffic jams can be alleviated by building more underground tunnels and parking garages to avoid various of vehicles moving together in the same way at peak time.

 In conclusion, with some issues caused by the increasing use of cars. I am convinced that discouraging the car might seem to be a quick solution, however, it is highly unlikely to be a permanent cure.

Answer 1

Mình có 2 góp ý nhỏ, bạn xem thế nào nhé:

1) "Moreover, traffic jams also is another challenge"..."there are very heavy traffic jams" => câu trước bạn dùng "traffic jams" và để ở singular, câu sau lại pural.

2) Một số lỗi nhỏ về dấu câu và từ :

- " I personally do not think I will be an effective way." => "I" thứ 2 là "it" , chắc bạn ghi nhầm vì hăng say đánh máy quá. :)

- " In conclusion, with some issues caused by the increasing use of cars. I am convinced that discouraging the car might seem to be a quick solution, however, it is highly unlikely to be a permanent cure." => nên chỉnh lại là :" In conclusion, with some issues caused by the increasing use of cars, I am convinced that discouraging the car might seem to be a quick solution; however, it is highly unlikely to be a permanent cure." => chỉ là về dấu câu thôi. ^_^

Cheers,

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