Writing- strengths and weaknesses

Question

Today, it is not easy to choose a career.Hundreds of students are leaving schools and universities every year to seek employment in the various professions, though employment opportunities are not increasing proportionately. About me, no matter whether i want to get an interview or not, i have to do so. And if i can pass the interview, i will get my job. That why I am preparing the necessary skills for my  career. Thus,  strengths are important for me to show employers my ability. Firstly, I am a dynamic girl. That helps me to be willing to do everything and travel everywhere I like. Charity fund for elderly in my province-Binh Phuoc is one of my dreams. And I ask for help from enterprises because I can not do it by myself. If I am too shy, I can not persuade them to invest in my project. Moreover I would like to utilize my abilities for encouraging those ones who lack of confidence in opening up their minds and expressing their emotions. Secondly, my another strength is adaptability. I am a quick learner and love to learn new things. I have the ability to cope with failures and try to learn from my mistakes. Finally, one of my biggest strengths is self-confidence. I totally believe in myself. Making a speech of my points  before a lot of audiences is not a problem to me.  I always make purpose of my life and try my best to finish it. They are three biggest strengths of mine. Therefore, I would like to join SELF project to make use of these strengths, discover another strong points and improve my weaknesses for my career in the future.

Answer 1

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