IELTS task 1 - Dubai Gold Sales 2002

Question

The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams.

Write a report describing the information in the graph below.

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The line graph illustrates the changes and differents in the quantities of gold were sold in Dubai for 12 months of the year 2002.

As can be seen from the graph, Dubai Gold Sales increased slightly and slowly by approximately 20 million Dirhams from the beginning at 200 million Dirhams  to 220 Million Dirhams  in February, then suddenly rocketing to the peak at 350 Million Dirhams  in March, before falling dramatically and rapidly to 250 million Dirhams  in the next month. The research documented a steady decrease of 130 million Dirhams  to 120 million Dirhams  in July, following this was a fluctuation around 150 million Dirhams  ranging from 120 Million Dirhams  to 200 million Dirhams  in the last five months of the research.

In conclusion, the number of Dubai Gold Sales was subjected to a relatively strong and swift upward trend from January to February, in comparison with a slow downward trend in the last eight months of the year 2002.

Answer 1

it should be modified as below: 

The line graph illustrates the changes and differents in the quantities of gold were sold in Dubai for 12 months of the year 2002.  

As can be seen from the graph, Dubai Gold Sales increased slightly and slowly--> [slightly] no need to use slowly. by approximately 20 million Dirhams from the beginning at 200 million Dirhams  to 220 Million Dirhams  in February, then suddenly rocketing to the peak at 350 Million Dirhams  in March, before falling dramatically and rapidly --> [dramatically/rapidly] because these two adj have the similar meaning. to 250 million Dirhams  in the next month. The research documented a steady decrease of 130 million Dirhams  to 120 million Dirhams  in July, following this was a fluctuation  [fluctuation of what ?] in the period of 3 months from july to october, DUBAI witnessed a fluctuating change in terms of Gold sales. --> around 150 million Dirhams  ranging from 120 Million Dirhams  to 200 million Dirhams  in the last five months of the research.

In conclusion, the number of Dubai Gold Sales was subjected to a relatively strong and swift upward trend from January to February, in comparison with a slow downward trend in the last eight months of the year 2002.