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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, It is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Having innate talents is greatly advantageous for some people to gain recognition while other people need lots of training to succeed in life. Personally, I believe that education not only makes ordinary people proficient in particular fields but also nurtures talents of some natural geniuses.

 

On the one hand, genetics inheritance enables individuals to do their performances in a greater way than do others. Take Yao Ming, a famous Chinese basketball player, as an example. His superior height brought him to the sport and earned him a myriad of awards. Another recognized talent, Mozart, should be mentioned. At his early age, he showed his gift for music and then sought his fame with hundreds of musical works. For those people, natural talents and hereditary traits are shortcuts to success and significantly contribute to their achievements.

 

On the other hand, education plays a vital role in recognizing a talent of people, training them properly, and inspiring them to follow their chosen field to an end. Cristiano Ronaldo, a well-known footballer, luckily possesses stunning skills to acquire popularity and prosperity. Behind his glory, however, is thousands of arduous training hours he has been through to keep fit and to improve his techniques. Another legendary swimmer should be taken into consideration. Despite having wonderfully physical traits, Michael Phelps woud not have reached his peak if he had not had proper workouts. Also, he must learn how important nutritional portions are to his profession. Moreover, everyone must experience ups and downs at least once in their life. With the help of education and training, both an inborn talent and an ordinary person learn how to balance their life to sustain passion for their job.

In conclusion, although inborn talents gain a quicker and easier access to success, they, like other ordinary people, need education and training to thrive in their life.

 

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Mình mới học ielts nên cũng còn đang kém lắm, cho mình góp ý 1 chút về kết luận nhé. vì ngữ pháp hay từ vựng thì pro quá mình không biết nói gi thêm ^^

Mình thấy kết luận có vẻ như mở ra 1 ý khác idea mới. Theo mình thì ket luận chỉ nên paraphrase lại opinion của bạn, nhấn mạnh ý là any child can be taught to become talent....

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bài viết rất tốt. Relevant examples nhiều. mình có một số góp ý như sau:

makes ordinary people become gifted:Cá nhân mình thì nghĩ không có cụm "make sb become gifted" bao giờ, vì gifted thì nó là "inherited trait".

-naturally special abilities: Cụm này không sai về mặt ngữ pháp nhưng mình không nghĩ nó là đúng, thường chỉ dừng lại ở special abilities hay natural talents.

-Cristiano Ronaldo example:Việc đề cập "luckily possesses ...to acquire..." và câu sau đó nói về việc anh ấy luyện tập mình cảm thấy không liên quan cho lắm, và có cảm tưởng là anh ấy thành công là nhờ vào cái talents vốn có nhiều hơn.

-everyone must experience ups and downs at least once in his life: bây giờ thường là người ta dùng "their" hơn là his.

- either an inborn talent or an ordinary person learns: đoạn này là both ... and, vì nếu dùng either thì sẽ là hoặc người này hoặc người kia (tức là vẫn chỉ là 1 trong 2 chứ k phải cả 2) đạt được thành công.

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cảm ơn bạn vì đã góp ý.

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