IELTS Task 2 [closed]

Question

Having a balanced diet and eating balanced meals is the key to a healthy life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people are of the opinion that they could have a healthy life because of their diet. I partly agree with that point of view, however, in order to have a healthy life there are many ways  apart from having balanced meals.

First, it is certain true that eating well plays a major role in maintaining healthy. To have  a healthy diet we should have more vegetables, fruits and fiber in our meals and have less foods containing fat and calorie. Recent social statistics have shown that eighty percent of people who eats a balanced meal has a good healthy and can reduce risk of suffer from cardiovascular  and other diseases relate to diet. Besides, healthy diet is not only help you have a good health, but also help you get a beautiful body.

However, eating nutritious meals is important, it still is not enough to have a good healthy. By dint of having a healthy diet and playing regular sport we will have a healthy life. Doing exercise you can eliminate excess energies which may be cause of  many diseases.  Experts advise that one should spend from thirty minutes to one hour to do exercise everyday that will help you improve both your physical life and mental life. In addition on, balancing between work time and leisure time is also an effective way to have a good health.

To conclude, it is essential to combine both having scientific meals and doing regular sport in order to have a long and healthy life.

Many people are of the opinion that they could have a healthy life because of their diet. I partly agree with that point of view, however, in order to have a healthy life there are many ways  apart from having balanced meals.

First, it is certain true that eating well plays a major role in maintaining healthy. To have  a healthy diet we should have more vegetables, fruits and fiber in our meals and have less foods containing fat and calorie. Recent social statistics have shown that eighty percent of people who eats a balanced meal has a good healthy and can reduce risk of suffer from cardiovascular  and other diseases relate to diet. Besides, healthy diet is not only help you have a good health, but also help you get a beautiful body.

However, eating nutritious meals is important, it still is not enough to have a good healthy. By dint of having a healthy diet and playing regular sport we will have a healthy life. Doing exercise you can eliminate excess energies which may be cause of  many diseases.  Experts advise that one should spend from thirty minutes to one hour to do exercise everyday that will help you improve both your physical life and mental life. In addition on, balancing between work time and leisure time is also an effective way to have a good health.

To conclude, it is essential to combine both having scientific meals and doing regular sport in order to have a long and healthy life.

Answer 1

Having a balanced diet and eating balanced meals is the key to a healthy life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer 2

Hi Linin,

You did a great job for your writing. For the first time to read your essay, I'm so surprised because of the very long essay, but I'm just confused. To be honest, your basic writing is good enough. I don't give you a band, so I can correct some mistakes below.

1. Recent social statistics have shown that eighty percent of people who eats a balanced meal has a good healthy and can reduce risk of suffer from cardiovascular  and other diseases relate to diet.

--> Some expression of quantity can take either a singular or a plural verb depending on whether the noun in the prepositional phrase is singular or plural. EX: One-third of the population is going to vote/ One-third of the people are going to vote. So I think you should use the plural verb here. 

 

2. Besides, healthy diet is not only help you have a good health, but also help you get a beautiful body.

--> You should remove "to-be": An healthy diet not only helps you have a good health, but also helps you get a beautiful body.

 

3. However, eating nutritious meals is important, it still is not enough to have a good healthy.

--> However, although eating nutritious meals is important, I would say it is still not enough to have a good healthy. (You'd better use conjunction to link 2 simple sentences together because it is very good for cohesion and conherence in your essay) 

 

Those are some my opinions. I hope that it would be better for you. Good luck!

 

M.

 

 

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Thanks you very much

Answer 3

Bài viết khá hay và mạch lạc :). Bạn có thể chia sẻ với mình về cách dùng và ý nghĩa của cụm từ 'By dint of Ving' không? cảm ơn bạn.

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cụm này có nghĩa là nhờ có cái gì đó nên mới có cái kia bạn ạ
cấu trúc by dint of + n or phrase n, main clause

Answer 4

"...other diseases relate to diet..."

 

I think you should use "related" instead of "relate" because it is not the main verb.