Bài IELTS task 1 sáng ngày 2/8/2016

Question

The bar chart gives information about variation in the proportion of average house prices in 5 big cities over a 1990-2002 period from 1989.

It is clear from the chart that the cost of house prices in three cities ( New York, London and Tokyo) dereased significantly between 1990 and 1995. However, there was a rapid rise in the percentage of housing cost in London over the 1996-2002 period.

From 1990 to 1995, the rates of house prices in both the Tokyo and the London dropped dramatically by over 7 percent, but the figure for New York was smaller, by eaxactly 5 percent. In contrast, the percentage of house prices in Madrid and Frankfurt have a slight incease of under 3 percent .

Between 1996 to 2002, there was a slowly derease in the house cost of the Franfurt. Nevertheless, the figures for four remaining cities  rose sharply. Particularly, the house-price rate in New York went up by  around 10 percent, the figures for Madrid and Tokyo rose by about 2% and 3% respectively and the biggest increase was seen in the house price of London, by above 15 %.

Answer 1

It is true that riding a biclycle is not prevalent among many people around the world although cycling is a better way to mitigate environmental contamination than other types of transport.Reasons for this vary, and steps need to be taken to promote the useage of bicycles.

I think that the first sentence which you used "better... than" structure is not correct. Because when you used "a better way" that is a noun, so it cannot connect with "than" . That means you should change a bit, for example "....rather than other types of transport".

"Reasons for this vary" does not make sense and impolite, maybe that should be changed in this way "reasons for this phenomenon will be discussed in this essay and resolutions need to be pointed out to promote the usage of bicycles".

To begin with, there are several reasons why few people use bicycles on a regular basis. 

few people regularly use bicyckes

 Firstly, these days people is often busier than before   ever. Many people have to take responsibility for a mountain of work at their working places; therefore, they want to spend less time on transport as much as possible.

This obviously causes  this is a dominant reason lead them to choose motor vehicles such as motorbikes or cars. 

 Another justification for this problem Another supportive explanation for the phemomenon is that today a number of people lead possess a sedentery lifestyle. 

Using bicycles consumes more energy than   needs more physical demand than  other types of transport, which deters people from choosing this means of transport. 

Firstly, the government should conduct  organize or held  suitable campaigns to raise public awareness of the detrimental  beneficial effects of motor vehicles bicycles on the environment.

thus people cycling can move faster than using the lanes of other types of transport.

thus, cyclists might move easier and faster on such lanes.

Finally, the government can impose heavy taxes on cars and motorbikes, so people will think carefully (excogitate) before buying ones.

In conclusion, the increase in using this environmental friendly vehicle is intractable, andsolutions are available to mitigate the problem. this part of the sentence does not make sense, you should re-wirte this conclusion.

hoping this is useful for you.