Writing task 2: Indicate and Support your level of agreement
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Question: Shopping is dangerous because it makes people selfish, and careless with money. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, shopping has become a popular activity in almost developed countries in the world. However, it still has some negative aspects and two of them being matters of some controversy are making consumers more and more selfish and causing considerably less disciplined with their money.

On the one hand, there is a number of shoppers whose financial controller skills are quite strong. This enable them to pay their daily bills and shop for every family member. Additionally, the financial advisers are also go for helping develop such skills. But, actually, the percentage of people being rich money managers is not high, perhaps it makes up just over 20 percent of the world population.

On the other hand, development of advertising is one of the key reasons why lots of consumers have become selfishly. They are easily persuaded at a psychological level by advertisers , and feel inadequate if do not have products such as brand new smartphones, nice shoes or cars. This creates willing shoppers, who are always thinking about themselves instead of activities for community welfare like charity. As well as this, the credit cards appearance is also making people careless with their money. The reason is in cashless society, consumers can immediately buy things that they want before they earn the money to pay.

To conclusion, economical factors like advertising and credit cards are created to bring more benefits and conveniences to residents in many parts of life, particularly in shopping. In some cases, but, they have been causing a result that consumers in the world, especially the developed economies are being much less unselfish and reducing considerably effort necessary to think how to earn real money.

 

 

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Nowadays, shopping has become a popular activity in almost developed countries in the world. However, it still has some negative aspects and two of them being matters of some controversy are that shopping is making consumers be more and more selfish and causing considerably less disciplined with wasting their money carelessly. (bạn nên đưa thêm ý kiến của bản thân có đồng ý hay không nữa nha)

On the one hand, there is (are) a number of shoppers whose financial controller skills are quite strong. This enable them to pay their daily bills and shop for every family member. Additionally (In addition), the financial advisers are also go for helping develop such skills. But, actually, the percentage of people being rich money managers is not high, perhaps it makes up just over 20 percent of the world's population.

On the other hand, the development of advertising (advertisement) is one of the key major reasons why lots of consumers have become selfishly. They are easily persuaded at a psychological level by advertisers , and feel inadequate if they do not have products such as (brand) new smartphones, nice shoes or cars. This creates willing passionate shoppers, who are always thinking about themselves instead of charity and society activities for community welfare like charity to help the poor or the homeless... As well as Apart from this, the credit cards appearance is also making makes people careless with their money. The reason is Therefore, in cashless society, consumers can immediately buy things that they want before   by using credit cards that they earn the money to pay.

To In conclusion, economical some factors like advertising and credit cards are created to bring have brought benefits and conveniences to for residents in many parts (aspects) of life, particularly in shopping. In some cases, but, they have been causing a result that consumers in the world, especially the developed economies are being much less unselfish and reducing considerably effort necessary to think how to earn real money.(Khẵng định lại ý kiến bản thân)

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