mong mọi người góp ý What can young people do to help protect and improve their local environment?(140-190words)1.recycling things 2.cycling or walking instead of using cars 3.(your own idea)

Question

Nowadays, the environment plays an extremely essential role in people's lives. Therefore, what we need to do is to protect and improve it in order to create a healthier place to live in.

Firstly, we can recycle different materials into useful things, instead of throwing them away deliberately. For example, you can turn an old door frame into a coffee table, reuse ketchup bottles as a pancake squirter or you can even make a shoe rack from and old wine box.

Secondly, it is no doubt that using cars is one of the main factors causing environmental pollution. Therefore, our duty is to try to encourage inhabitants to use other safe means of transportation such as riding bicycle, going on foot to reduce the amount of carbon dioxide launched into the atmosphere.

And lastly, in my opinion, planting trees is also a very effective way to help us improve the environment by reducing global warming and providing a home for many species of wildlife. Trees can give human incredibly great benefits as they improve our air quality, provide shade and beautify our landscapes.

In conclusion, the protection of the environment is a concern that all people around the world have to be involved in, because this planet is our home and we have to preserve it in all cause.

Answer 1

Chào bạn bài viết của bạn rất tốt và mình cũng có một số góp ý cho bạn

1. Chỗ Firstly, we can recycle different materials........... Chỗ này vì bạn đã dùng trạng từ secondly rồi, để tránh bị lặp lại dạng từ, bạn nên dùng first of all, first.
2. Chỗ and lastly mình nghĩ bạn nên dùng Finally vì ít ai dùng lastly lắm bạn ạ!

Umh bài viết của bạn khá là xuất sắc, dù sao đó chỉ là ý kiến của riêng mình và mình cũng cảm ơn bạn rất nhiều. Mình học được rất nhiều từ bài viết của bạn.

Comments

thanks bạn nhiều nha với lời góp ý của bạn hihi, mình sẽ chú ý hơn. Mình đang phân vân vì viết hơn 190 từ nên đang cố gắng cắt bớt để k vượt quá

Answer 2

Secondly, it is no doubt that using cars is one of the main factors  (factor) causing environmental pollution. Therefore, our duty is to try to encourage inhabitants to use other safe means of transportation such as riding bicycle, going on foot to reduce the amount of carbon dioxide launched into the atmosphere.

And lastly, in my opinion, planting trees is also a very effective way to help us improve the environment by reducing global warming and providing a home for many species of wildlife​ (wildfile species). Trees can give human incredibly great benefits as they improve our air quality, provide shade and beautify our landscapes. (Tree incredibly can provide human beings a great amount of benefits, improve air quality as well as beautify our lanscapes)
 

Comments

"one of the main factors" đúng mà bạn ơi.

 

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Answer 3

Nowadays, the environment plays an extremely essential role in people's lives. Therefore, what we need to do is to protect and to improve it in order to create a healthier place to live in.

 

First of all, we can recycle different materials into useful things, instead of throwing them away deliberately. For example, you can turn an old door frame into a coffee table, reuse ketchup bottles as a pancake squirt or you can even make a shoe rack from and old wine box.

 

Secondly, it is no doubt that using cars is one of the main factors causing environmental pollution. Therefore, our duty is to try to encourage inhabitants to use other safe means of transportation such as riding bicycle, going on foot to reduce the amount of carbon dioxide launched into the atmosphere.

 

And the last but not least, in my opinion, planting trees is also a enoumously effective way to help us improve the environment by reducing global warming and providing a home for many species of wildlife. Trees can give human incredibly great benefits as they improve our air quality,supply  shade and beautify to our landscapes.

 

In conclusion, the protection of the environment is a concern that all people around the world have to be involved in, because this planet is our home and we have to preserve it in all cause.

Comments

Nếu bạn dùng "enormously effective" thì trước đó là mạo từ an.
Với cả "beautify" hình như không có giới từ "to" bạn ơi. 

 

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