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Question

It is argued that educational quality are falling these days. In this paper I will point out some main reasons for this and also put forward some possible solutions.

First of all, the reason why students are not efficient enough in basic skills is that they have to learn many other sujects, thus distracted from main ones. For example, my younger brother has to learn science, geography and the like in his first year at primary school when he has not even known how to write properly. It is manifest that the more time pupils spend on less important subjects, the less time they have for crucial ones like writing, reading and mathematics. Also, lacks of discipline clearly contribute to the decline of schooling standard. Teachers nowadays do not have the right to punish students, which presents as an obstacle to the process of teaching.

To address this problem, there must be a change in school subjects. The number of classes of core subjects should be increased and the that of unnecessary ones should be cut down. Students should only learn other things when they are competent in literacy and numeracy. Furthermore, teacher should be given the right to punish students if it is necessary for their studies. Given that, schooling will be much effective because both students and teachers know what they can do and what they can not.

Raising educational is a matter of society as a whole, and this for sure can not be accomplished in one day. However, if it comes to solving the problem, I believe that these abovementioned solutions will take effect.

Answer 1

It is argued   there are different views debating that educational quality are falling decresing these days. In this paper I will point out  some main reasons for this and also put forward some possible solutions. indicate some solutions after examining some below main reasons.

First of all, the reason why students are not efficient enough in basic skills is that they have to learn many other sujects It is true that students have no basic skills because they have to study a wide variety of subjects. Thus; distracted from main ones. For example, my younger brother has to learn science, geography and the like in his first year at primary school when he has not even known does not know how to write properly. It is manifest that the more time pupils spend on less important subjects them , the less time they have for crucial ones like pupils concentrate on writing, reading and mathematics. Also, lacks  lack of discipline clearly contribute to the decline of schooling standard. Teachers nowadays do not have the right to punish students, which presents as an obstacle to the process of teaching.

To address this problem above argument, there must be a change in school subjects. The number of classes of core subjects should be increased and the that of unnecessary ones should be cut down. Students should only learn other things when they are competent in literacy and numeracy. Furthermore, teacher should be given the right to punish students if it is necessary for their studies.  teachers should have interesting lessons in order to attract their students.Given that, schooling will be much effective because both students and teachers know what they can do and what they can not. cannot

Raising educational education is a matter of society as a whole, and this for sure can not be accomplished in one day. However, if it comes to solving the problem, I believe that these abovementioned above-mentioned solutions will take effect.

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Comments

vậy à, c thì thử ở đâu vậy ??? đc overall cao ko??

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Mình chưa thỉ thử ^^ Chỉ có tự làm đề vậy thôi

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Dear khanhnguyen!

After reading your essay, I have already agreed with the comments of bignose94mc. As well as I also have some comments for you.

1. Your essay answered the topic question clearly, however, it is quite simple and a little bit idea. So I think you should give at least 2 idea in each paragraphs and extent for these.

2. I think in each paragraph, you should have a topic sentence before you writ supporting ideas for this topic sentence because in each paragraph need to focus in one main idea.

Good luck to you in next essay.