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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

In the modern society, the number of people, who want to have their offspring lately, is increasing. There are some reasons for this recent phenomenon, which definitely impacts on society and family life. In this essay, two main causes for this social trend will be identified before its pros and cons will be reviewed.

Two principal reasons could be given to justify the trend of giving birth at the later stage of life. First, many young couples, today, want to provide their children with a good foundation so they devote almost their time to work and seek the promotion in their career, which can help them to earn more money. As a result, they decide to delay parenthood until they achieve their target in their work. Secondly, young parents prefer to spend their initial stage of the marriage on travelling, hanging out with friends rather than engage in bringing up babies.

In my opinion, I believe that this phenomenon could do more harm than good to the society as well as personal life. It is no shadow of doubt that this trend offers a few benefits for young couples. They have more time to cultivate themselves to work and do some their hobbies. On the other hand, the tendency to have children at later ages might exert a detrimental influence on society also family life. As individuals are giving birth to babies later, there have been a lot of diseases resulting from their poor physical health, for instance, Down, heart disease and many other dangerous affections. Furthermore, when the children grow up, there will be a generation gap between them and their parent. Consequently, the children could have a hard time adapting themselves to parents, which leads to intense debates among them.

In conclusion, there are two major reasons why people, nowadays, prefer to delay their parenthood, that are related to the hope to provide a good foundation for their children and have more time for their hobbies. Moreover, I strongly claim that the disadvantages of this trend outweigh its advantages.
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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

In the modern society, the number of people, who want to have their offspring lately, is increasing. There are some reasons for this recent phenomenon, which definitely impacts on society and family life. In this essay, two main causes for this social trend will be identified before its pros and cons will be reviewed. <Commas are not needed in defining relative clauses>

Two principal reasons could be given to justify the trend of giving birth at the later stage of life. First, many young couples, today, want to provide their children with a good foundation so they devote almost most of their time to working and seeking the promotion in their career, which can help them to earn more money. As a result, they decide to delay parenthood until they achieve their target in their work. Secondly, young parents prefer to spend their initial stage of the marriage on travelling, hanging out with friends rather than engage in bringing up babies.

<Almost is an adverb so it cannot be followed by a noun.

Devote + to + V-ing>

In my opinion, I believe that this phenomenon could do more harm than good to the society as well as personal life. It is no shadow of doubt that this trend offers a few benefits for to young couples. They have more time to cultivate themselves to work and do some their hobbies of theirs <because both some and their are determiners, we cannot put 2 determiners before a noun> . On the other hand, the tendency to have children at later ages might exert a detrimental influence on society also as well as family life<also is an adverb>. As individuals are giving birth to babies later, there have been a lot of diseases resulting from their poor physical health, for instance, Down, heart disease and many other dangerous affections effects < affection means a feeling of liking someone or something>. Furthermore, when the children grow up, there will be a generation gap between them and their parents. Consequently, the children could have a hard time adapting themselves to parents, which leads to intense debates among them.

In conclusion, there are two major reasons why people, nowadays, prefer to delay their parenthood, that are related to the hope to provide a good foundation for their children and have more time for their hobbies. Moreover, I strongly claim that the disadvantages of this trend outweigh its advantages.

 

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