There is a general increase in anti-social behaviors and lack of respect for others. What are the causes and solutions?
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Along with the rapid development of technology, our community has constantly raised multiple serious issues, typically the acceleration in anti-social behaviors and lack of respect to others. Personally, I believe that there are several compelling reasons to interpreter as well as suggest profound solutions to address those matters.

On the one hand, disobedience and disrespectfulness for others result from multiple causes. Firstly, at the present, most teenagers who are extremely susceptible by extrinsic elements will be tremendously affected by violent activities from brutal games in technological appliances. Additionally, the carelessness of parents and educationalists also plays dominant ground caused children’s recalcitrance in treatment to other people. Those students were not accurately oriented by their caretakers they would derogate others’ dignity owing to misleading perception. Continuously, government’s education policy has not effectively operated in training learners’ morality which is seriously debilitated.

Some measurements can be taken into account to mitigate its detrimental influences. First and foremost, parents should occupy indispensible position to guide their children how to behave with other citizens. In addition to this, they need to employ sufficient punishments to reach educated goals together with prevent the painful damages of kids’ self-esteem. There is another significant noteworthy solution supporting this viewpoint is that authorities should enact legislations to ban barbaric games from being played by youthful customers. Not only that but also institutes should collaborate with learners’ families to generate a congruent environment to shape pupils’ characteristics.

In conclusion, anti-social performances and lack of courtesy for others stem from many prominent reasons, vicious activities from automatic devices and the conspicuous absence of parents and relevant agencies in educating students. As a result, there are several ideal solutions, important roles both caretakers and schools, should be implemented to tackle this phenomenon.

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Along with the rapid development of technology, our community has constantly raised multiple serious issues, typically the acceleration in anti-social behaviors and the lack of respect to others. Personally, I believe that there are several compelling reasons to interpreter as well as suggest profound solutions to address those matters.

On the one hand, disobedience and disrespectfulness for others result from multiple causes. Firstly, at the present, most teenagers who are extremely susceptible by extrinsic elements will be tremendously affected by the violent activities from brutal games in technological appliances. Additionally, the carelessness of parents and educationalists also plays dominant ground causing children’s recalcitrance in treatment to other people. Those students were not accurately oriented by their caretakers they would derogate others’ dignity owing to misleading perception. Continuously, government’s education policy has
( policies have )
not effectively operated in training learners’ morality which is seriously debilitated.

Some measurements can be taken into account to mitigate its detrimental influences (effects). First and foremost, parents should occupy indispensible position to guide their children how to behave with others citizens. In addition to this, they need to employ sufficient punishments to reach educated goals together with prevent the painful damages of kids’ self-esteem. There is another significant noteworthy solution supporting this viewpoint is that authorities should enact legislations to ban barbaric games from being played by youthful customers. Not only that but also institutes should collaborate with learners’ families to generate a congruent environment to shape pupils’ characteristics.

In conclusion, anti-social performances and lack of courtesy for others stem from many prominent reasons, vicious activities from automatic devices and the conspicuous absence of parents and relevant agencies in educating students. As a result, there are several ideal solutions, important roles both caretakers and schools, should be implemented to tackle this phenomenon.

 

 

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Issue related to high school students’ assessment to teachers has frequently discussed these days. Some people are of the opinion that the enhancement of education needs students’ evaluation, while others argue that it might lead to disrespect of students. Nevertheless, I find both viewpoints convincing for the following reasons.

On the one hand, some people believe that students ought not to criticize their teachers. To begin with, it is true that minors have insufficient knowledge to assess their educators. To clarify, teachers are those well-trained to meet teaching requirements and had experienced students’ lives. Whereby, they might acknowledge that what are the best for their students. Furthermore, if we place the right to evaluate the elder to youngsters before their responsible ages, they might they would become less probable law- abiding citizens. For examples, the rate of juvenile delinquents in western nations where they could criticize their teachers easily is far higher than that in Eastern countries such as Japanese.

On the other hand, others assert that students’ criticism would improve the teaching quality. It is clear that the teaching methods of teachers nowadays sometimes do not engage students. Take Asian education for the example, where teacher- centred paradigm is placed higher that student-centered one and students ‘words are weightless. As a result, the lessons in high schools seem very monotonous because the teachers keep teaching in the same ways which do not meet students’ interest.

As far as I am concerned, feedbacks from students are seemed as an effective way to enhance education system. However, students must do it in very respectful and polite ways.

In short, students’ evaluation has occurred in many countries and it has showed its effectiveness in bettering off education. We should encourage it to be spread to other countries.

 

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Firstly, thanks for your valuable comments, I will keep practicing on that.

Issue related to high school students’ assessment to teachers has frequently discussed these days (This sentence makes me confusing because I don't really know what its mean, I thought this sentence does not link with this topic). Some people are of the opinion that the enhancement of education needs students’ evaluation, while others argue that it might lead to disrespect of students. Nevertheless, I find both viewpoints convincing for the following reasons. (This introduction is beyond the requested theme) I advise you that you should go straight when you meet some topics like this one because If you outlines a long paragraph to introduce the topic You will be easily gone wrong direction and do not keep on the topic. 

On the one hand, some people believe that students ought not to criticize their teachers. To begin with, it is true that minors have insufficient knowledge to assess their educators. To clarify, teachers are those well-trained to meet teaching requirements and had experienced students’ lives. Whereby, they might (indentify) acknowledge (that) what are the best for their students. Furthermore, if we place the right to evaluate the elder to youngsters before their responsible ages, they might they would become less probable law- abiding citizens ( this sentence is very difficult to follow, I don't reach its idea). For examples, the rate of juvenile delinquents in Wwestern nations where they could easily criticize their teachers easily is far higher than that in Eastern countries such as Japanese.

On the other hand, others assert that students’ criticism would improve the teaching quality. It is clear that the teaching methods of teachers nowadays sometimes do not engage students (should use "attract" or "get attention from students" I though that word is "participate in" instead of "attract"). Take Asian education for the example ( Asian education as a compelling example), where teacher- centred paradigm is placed higher that student-centered one and students ‘words are weightless (this sentence also repeats the abovemetioned mistake because this idea is so ambiguous and difficult to understand) ( Asian education as a compelling example, in which society often appeciates educators' functions rather than students' voice) . As a result, the lessons in high schools seem very monotonous because the teachers keep teaching in the same ways which do not meet students’ interest.

As far as I am concerned,  However (nonetheless) --- From my perspective, feedbacks from students are seemed as an effective way to enhance education system. However, students must do it in very respectful and polite ways.

In short, students’ evaluation has occurred in many countries and it has showed its effectiveness in bettering off education. We should encourage it to be spread to other countries.

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