Mình cũng là thành viên mới thôi :) thấy bài bạn chưa có ghóp ý ^^ mạnh dạn "thử" sửa thử theo suy nghĩ của mình, có gì không đúng đừng trách mình nha T__T
Ever since the first presence of tobacco, people have been unforbidden to use it as akind of drug. => Ever since+ clause thì phải (?): Ever since the first tobacco was presented, people....
From the point of view of some people,the free access to tobacco should be prohibited by the legislation. I am neither supportive nor against this idea due to two reasons which I will set out below. => I neither support nor against
On one hand, the tobacco has an extremely bad effect on our health. The prolonged time of using tobaccos might cause various serious cancers in the body.
=> cause a various forms of cancer: như này chắc là đủ rồi :-? như kia hơi dài dòng mà mình thấy sai sai sao đó...mà không biết fix sao :))
The tobacco consists of many carcinogenic substances which will do severe harms to the organs such as lungs or brain.
=> The tobacco consists many carcinogenic substances
=> mình không chắc ngữ pháp bạn dùng đúng?...nhưng nghe hơi hướng hơi dịch thành tiếng việt...
sửa: "which severely damage some organs such as...
(harm to do something...mình thử tra rồi, mà không biết có harm to something hay harm something không?...nhưng damage something/sb)
Moreover, the passive smokers also suffer from illnesses by breathing in the smoke emitted from the tobacco.
(Mình không biết là bạn biết chưa, nhưng mình nói lại đoạn này thử...tại chỗ này mình không hiểu lắm) Tobacco (uncount+count noun): uncount là chỉ chất, hay thành phần gì đó..., còn count là thuốc lá phải không nhỉ?,,,, nên mình nghĩ bạn nên cân nhắc điền "s" sao đó cho phù hợp....nên cái cuối cùng theo mình hiểu thì nên thêm "s" vào thành from tobaccos...
On the other hand, it is evident that a nation benefits a huge advantage in economy from the industry of manufacturing tobaccos.
=> thấy nó hơi sao sao, mình nghĩ nên sửa...: For a nation, a huge benefit from the industry of manufacturing tobaccos have a no-denial advantage.
Annually, tobacco companies contribute to the budget of the nation by paying millions of
dollars for taxes.
=> contribute something (to sth): to give sth especially money or goods...
=> contribute to sth: to be one of the causes
=> tobacco companies contribute a huge budget to a nation by paying millions dollars of taxes
This source of money makes up to a remarkable proportion in the entire finance. As the result, these companies stimulate the growth of economy.
It would be better not to prevent citizens of a nation from using tobaccos.
It would be better for citizens to be prevented from using tobaccos
it would be better if+...(đk2)
Nevertheless, in the return of unhealthful effects of tobacco, it is necessary for the heavy taxes to be imposed on the production of tobacco.Also, it is prudent that the smokers reduce the intakes of tobacco in their daily life.
=> should reduce (?)
In conclusion, the tobacco has either good or bad influences on the society though, it is an inextricable part in the development of a country.