Forecasting Writing Task 2 - Tourism has negative implications on host countries. Reasons and solutions.
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In the modern society, it is generally believed that tourism has become a prevalent phenomenon to people's life. Some people may argue that it causes various drawbacks for host nations. This essay will examine some reasons and solutions to tackle this issue.

There are some reasons leading to negative effects of tourism. The first cause is tourists' bad-equipped consciousness. In fact, tourists are more likely to leave their wastes on the roads and spit everywhere though it has prohibited signs. Such actions may trigger others' imitations and lose civilizations of host countries. Another one is social issues since tourists travel for some dishonest purposes. There have been significant criminal cases in the world history related to kidnappings, smugglings or human trafficking. Those problems not only affect seriously citizens' lives but also disorder national politics. 

However, the reasons may be managed by the following solutions. Firstly, travelers should raise their own awareness when setting foot in oversea countries. This may form good sense of progress and spread to others. Besides, the governments between two nations need to have close relationships and cooperate together to deal with dangerous criminals. 

To conclude, the popularity of travelling around the world is now more and more despite of disadvantages in terms of civilizations and national security systems. It is recommended that people need to improve their awareness and the governments should tighten their politics and relationships as well.

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1///"In fact, tourists are more likely to leave their wastes on the roads and spit everywhere though it has prohibited signs. " mình nghĩ câu này dư từ "more". người ta thường viết: "more... than..."

và trước though cần dấu phẩy vì câtrước nó là một mệnh đề và tiếp theo đó là mệnh đề phụ

câu trên cũng có thể viết thành "In fact, it is more likely that tourists leave their wastes on the roads and spit everywhere, though there is preohibited sign."

2/// Ở cái solution: "Firstly, travelers should raise their own awareness when setting foot in oversea countries.", nếu tourists đã biết ý thức khi đặt chân đến nước khác thì đã chẳng có rác ở nước người ta. Có lẽ ý bạn muốn nói (và ở đây mình ghi kèm cả ví dụ, hơi chệch so với của bạn một chút, chủ yếu để trao đổi cho vui. Với lại, Khi viết, bạn nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể ): "We should raise people's awareness when setting foot in oversea countries by progandas or even by passing some laws.  For example, last year, due to bad behaviors of Chinese tourists when going to other countries, Chinese goverment passed a law to discourage those actions. That law really worked."

3///Besides, the governments between two nations need to have close relationships and cooperate together to deal with dangerous criminals. ---> Besides, the governments between two nations should tighten their relationships and cooperate together to deal with dangerous criminals.  (không nên dùng những từ mang tính ép buộc như need, must,... khi viết. Thay vào đó nên dùng should, may,...)

4///the popularity of travelling around the world is now more and more despite of disadvantages in terms of civilizations and national security systems.---> The travel amount increase rapidly despite of disadvantages in terms of civilizations and national security systems.

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Sorry @thunguyen for my late reply. I greatly appreciate your contributions. Those are my basic mistakes and I think I should add more relevant examples in the next essays. By the way, do you good at writing? Your rewrite sentences look so great! Hope to see your feedback in my writings later. Thanks!
Well, actually my writing is just fine but not very good. You can check for basic grammar mistakes at

http://spellcheckplus.com/

(but note that it's not a perfect machine)
Thanks for your help :)

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