The equality between the sexes is one of the most fashionable problems to talk about in the past decade. (học đâu câu này chuối quá) (cụm từ gợi ý: gender equality) This raises a certain question about whether universities should agree equal proportions of each gender in a particular subject. (diễn đạt khá hơn tí nhưng vẫn vòng vo) Regarding gender equality, it is argued that universities today should... I am in complete accord with this statement. Two primary reasons for this are as follows. (chỗ này cần đơn giản hết mức) I totally agree with this view.
First of all, it is an indisputable fact true that the same number of women and men for each subject is simply unrealistic gender imbalances in schools are... To be more specific, the quantity of students on any courses depends on the applications that the institution receives. (em đã xong Topic Sentence) (lúc này cần First Argument) First of all, it is clear that In reality, many courses are more popular with one gender than the other. A particular example is that nursing courses which often receive a greater number of female students than male ones have a tendency to attract more female applications. For that reason, it would be difficult to fill these courses if fifty percent of the places needed to go to the males. (câu bổ sung là cần thiết chỗ này, tuy nhiên câu này anh gạch vì nội dung chán) (em có thể nói, It is because these majors are more suitable for girls...) (còn thiếu nguyên 1 bộ Second Argument) In addition to this, another point worth mentioning is that (another là đủ nối rồi nhé) both sexes should be given the same opportunity in order to get access (cái get access này chưa đủ mạnh) in every subject. As a matter of fact, both sexes have a every individual should have the right to choose their suitable (nghĩ tạm từ này) subjects according to their abilities and interests , qualifications and personal preferences. Furthermore, the purpose of universities is to seek and educate the best candidates for society whatever regardless of their genders. As a result Hence, it might be unfair if a female student is rejected because of her gender while... they reject a female student having an impressive grade to replace with a male student with a lower grade.
(cho thêm 1 đoạn Phản Đối/ Ủng Hộ nữa vào đây, cũng 2 ý như bên trên)
In conclusion, it seems to me that... (viết đơn giản thôi nhé, đừng phí công cho Introduction hay Conclusion) that gender should be irrelevant in education as it would be both impractical and unfair to select a candidate based on gender.
Em có đi học ở đâu không? Cách viết tạm ổn, không bị sai Ngữ pháp hay có vấn đề gì về Từ vựng. Nhưng, bố cục bị sai. Anh dạy Viết Đoạn cho lớp anh thường dạy kỹ cách viết 1 Body như bên trên, bao gồm:
1 Argument
1 Explanation
1 Example
Tương tự cho argument còn lại, 2 arguments là xong 1 Body.
Body còn lại là ý ngược lại của Body 1. Xong 1 bài.