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The chart gives illustrates how many books were rented in Malton Town library in Britain over a period of 12 months. It is clear that the quantity was relatively developed in the year of 2009.

It is observed that in the first month of the year, the number of books rented of the library stood at 10 and then dropped slightly to only 6 and 7 books in Feb and March. This was following by a remarkable increase in the next four months to reach a peak of 20 books in August. Afterward, this upward trend was suddenly broken and the quantity of books rented plummeted dramatically in September to level at 12 books, only higher than January level. October quantity came with a small increase into 14 books, but this was not to last as it continued to drop again in November to only 9 books, even lower than the level it was in January. Ultimately, the last month of the year showed a significant rise back and reached the peak of 21 books, even higher than August level.

In summary, the number of books rented in the library was at highest in summer months while the weakest figures could be observed in springs. (205 words)

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The chart gives the chart ( that's enough) illustrates how many books were rented in Malton Town library in Britain over a period of 12 months. It is clear that the quantity was relatively developed in the year of 2009 (I'm not sure about this trend.If we compare the last month to January,it's totally developed.However, during the period, it's not actually gradual.) (Ex: Generally,from the first eight months in 2009,the amount of people rented books witnessed a significant growth except for a slight fall in the beginning of the year, while from August to December, the number of it fluctuated dramatically.)

It is observed that in the first month of the year, the number of books rented of the library stood at 10 and then dropped slightly to only 6 and 7 books in Feb and March. This was following by a remarkable increase in the next four months to reach a peak of 20 books in August. Afterward, this upward trend was suddenly broken and the quantity of books rented plummeted (plummet from sth to sth) (Ex: started to fall ) dramatically in September to level at 12 books , only higher than January level. October quantity In October,the quantity came with a small increase into 14 books, but this was not to last as it continued to drop again in November to only 9 books, even lower than the level it was in January. Ultimately, the last month of the year showed a significant rise back in book rented and reached the peak of 21 books, even higher than August's level.

In summary, the number of books rented(another word to express the word " Book rented": Borrowing books from library/Taking books out of the library ) in the library was at highest level in the summer months while the weakest figures could be observed in springs. (205 words)

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