assignment:private car and motorbike ownership has grown dramaticcally in recent years. this led to arise in traffic congestion.what could governments and individuals do to reduce congestion?

Question

nowadays,each person has their own vehicles.acording to the survey,the private car and motorbike ownership has grown dramatically in recent years.due to the increse in transport,this led to arise in traffic congestion.the question posed is that what could governtments and individuals do to reduce congestion?

in my oppinion, i think that both governments and individuals have reponsibility in reducing traffic jam.on the one hand,i want to talk about the governments.they should have some way to solve this problem.firstly,the governments should invest in public transportation such as bus , metro,train,e.t.c this is the most important way if the government really want to solve the problem beacause people feel more convenient and safe when they go to somewhere by the good or mordern vehicles.secondly,they should also extend or even more buil roads in oder to have more place for car parkings.it's good way but needing more finance.the finally,the government need to encourage citizens to use more public transportation than private vehicles.Not only encouraging but governments also offer some relentless laws.the people who don't obey laws should be punished strictly.i ensure that those ways will help the governtment a lot in decreasing traffic jam

on the other hand,i believe that individuals should have some way to reduce the congestion too.people should limit to use vehicles as less as they can.i think they only use their car in case which they need to go far.when they want to go some where neer their house it's essential to sovle the traffic congestion.people should have more knowledge in traffic

in conclusion,i think these ideas will help a lot in solving traffic congestion.i hope that people should  regard in this problems

Answer 1

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Comment:

-          Bài viết còn mắc quá nhiều lỗi spelling, viết hoa trong bài. Chú ý khi viết các từ: according, increase, government, responsibility, because, order, congestion.

-          .; this is the most important way if the government really wants to solve the problem beacausebecause people feel it is more convenient and safe when they go to somewhere by thevia good or mordernmodern vehicles.

                    Trong đoạn này, sau government là danh từ số ít, phải thêm s vào động từ. Ngoài ra, go to school, go to the cinema, nhưng go somewhere.

               pPeople should limit to the use of vehicles as lessto as little as they can

-          Limit something ( limit the use of vehicles)

-          As + adj/adv + as (Không sử dụng tính từ so sánh hơn trong cấu trúc này)

e.g: as much as you can, as little as they can, as soon as possible.