Đề thi IELTS ngày 16/5/2015

Question

Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. 
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are different opinions about whether students should judge their teachers. According to some people, this can cause disrespect and indiscipline to classrooms whilst opponents, myself included, claim that this will bring improvement to educational standard. This essay will show reasons for each side of views.

To begin with, those who believe that comments or criticism of learners make lose strictness in classrooms have quite convincing reasons for it. Firstly, most of students have immature behavior and thoughts; thus, they can lose their temper when they express their feelings to their teachers, which result in chaos. Secondly, other students can mimic their friends to overreact to teachers since they think they have the right to do this. As a result, it is difficult for teachers to keep their classes in order.

Likewise, other people believe that judgments of students help to enhance the quality of education because of several main reasons. One reason is that this makes teachers understand their limitations to remove, which is able to help them to gain more achievements in their field of career. Another reason is that having the right to show opinions and wills brings a freedom to students. Thus, they can be satisfied with their learning environment; also it will be easier for both teachers and learners to have a good interaction.

To include, although comments of learners may lead to loss of discipline in some cases, it is extremely necessary for educational setting. If we keep a good control of the way students behave, however, it will reduce the indiscipline and raise the quality.

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Answer 1

There are different opinions about whether students should judge their teachers or not. According to some people, this can cause disrespect and indiscipline to classrooms whilst opponents, myself included, claim that this will bring improvement to educational standard. This essay will show reasons for each side of views.

To begin with, those who believe that comments or criticism of learners make lose strictness in classrooms have quite convincing reasons for it. Firstly, most of students have immature behaviors and thoughts; thus, they can lose their temper when they express their feelings to their teachers, which result in chaos. Secondly, other students can mimic their friends to overreact to teachers since they think they have the right to do this. As a result, it is difficult for teachers to keep their classes in order.

Likewise, other people believe that judgments of students help to enhance the quality of education because of several main reasons. One reason is that this makes (chỗ này dùng helps hợp nghĩa hơn) teachers understand their limitations to remove, which is able to help (dùng enables hay hơn nhé) them to gain more achievements in their field of career. Another reason is that having the right to show opinions and wills brings a freedom to students. Thus, they can be satisfied with their learning environment; also it will be easier for both teachers and learners to have a good interaction.

To include, although comments of learners may lead to loss of discipline in some cases, it is extremely necessary for educational setting. If we keep a good control of the way students behave, however, it will reduce the indiscipline and raise the quality.

 

Comments

Chào bạn hangvt99,

Rất cảm ơn những góp ý của bạn. Mình sẽ khắc phục khắc phục những điểm mà bạn đã góp ý để bài viết được tốt hơn. Rất mong nhận được nhiều góp ý hơn nữa từ phía bạn, cho những bài viết tiếp theo. ^^

Chúc bạn ngày mới vui vẻ.

Answer 2

There are different opinions about whether students should judge their teachers. According to some people, this can cause disrespect and lack of discipline in classrooms whilst opponents, myself included, claim that this will bring improvement to educational standards. This essay will show reasons for each side.

To begin with, those who believe that comments about or criticism of educators create a loss of strictness in classrooms have quite convincing reasons for it. Firstly, most students have immature behavior and thoughts; thus, they can lose their temper when they express their feelings to their teachers, which results in chaos. Secondly, other students can mimic their friends and overreact to teachers since they think they have the right to do this. As a result, it is difficult for teachers to keep their classes in order.

Likewise, other people believe that judgments of students help to enhance the quality of education because of several main reasons. One reason is that this makes teachers understand their limitations and improve accordingly, which is able to help them to gain more achievements in their careers. Another reason is that having the right to show opinions and free will brings a freedom to students. Thus, they can be satisfied with their learning environment; also it will be easier for both teachers and learners to have a good interaction.

To conclude, although comments of learners may lead to loss of discipline in some cases, it is extremely necessary for the educational setting. If we keep a good control over the way students behave, however, it will reduce the lack of discipline and raise the quality of education.

Comment:

-          Bài viết tốt về ngữ pháp, tuy nhiên cần lưu ý về một số từ khi dùng và diễn đạt.

e.g: Likewise, other people believe that judgments of educators help to enhance the quality of education because of several main reasons. One reason is that this makes teachers understand their limitations  and improve accordingly, which is able to help them to gain more achievements in their careers.

Remove something, vì vậy câu này diễn đạt chưa rõ nghĩa.

-          Most + noun = most + of + the + noun

-          Thay vì dùng indiscipline , có thể dùng cụm lack of discipline để thay thế.

Comments

Em chào chị,

Em rất cảm ơn những góp ý của chị. Thật hay khi góp ý của chị trùng 2 điểm mà 1 người Úc góp ý cho em. Thứ nhất, ông ấy cũng thay "indiscipline" bởi "lack of discipline". Thứ hai, cái đoạn em diễn đạt "...teachers understand their limitations to remove" ông ấy bảo "sorry, I cannot understand what you mean". ^^ . Em đang không biết phải diễn đạt lại như thế nào thì nhận được góp ý của chị. Em rất cảm ơn chị.

Em chúc chị vui vẻ.