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Đề thi IELTS ngày 7/2/2015 - Bài Problem/Solution Band 5.0 của bạn Totoro

 

Bài Problem/Solution Essay Band 5.0 của bạn totoro:

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300 words – BAND 5.0

 

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*. This is not a proper topic sentence for your first body paragraph

1. Preposition of -> in

2. Wrong use of ‘the’

3. The generalization of the reason is not about the habit of the local people.

Missing article the before people.

4. Wrong article -> a country.

5. Instead of the leading, use chief, first, key, main, major, primary, prime, principal, overriding

6. Wrong article.

7. Unclear reference.

8. Wrong cohesive device -> in contrast

9. Collocation mistake: ‘boost’ doesn’t usually go with ‘horizon’

10. Should be ‘horizon of knowledge’

11. Informal cohesive device -> consequently, as a result.

12. This word does not fit the context.

13. Collocation mistake; Use effectively/adequately/completely instead of productively for tackling problems.

14. Wrong preposition -> of

15. Bad word choice

16. ‘Sightseeing’ is a noun, not a gerund

17. It is awkward to read “sightsee artifacts”

18. Parallelism: the natives -> the poor

19. Use modal verb -> can/could/should possibly use

20. Unnecessary complication

21. Unclear referencing

22. Unclear/ irrelevant to the context

 

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