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Question

Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons? Solutions to change negative attitudes

 

It is a argued that international tourism is bad for countries. However,many people believed that tourism brings countless benefits for the economic. In this essay, i will explain and suggest some measures for this issue.

On the one hand, some people think tourism has negative affects to the environment and the landscape. Firstly, they believed that tourism is the cause of traffic emission, noise pollution and resources wasted. For example, the traffics for travellers are the root of the climate changes include air pollution, noise pollution. As a result, plane exhaust has a significant effect to the Earth warming. Secondly, tourism could damage the ecological. Construction of road and campsites could prevent wild animals from finding their food . Finally, tourism is the cause of the rise of pollution and emission.

On the other hand, there are some opinions that tourism provides a large number of benefits, especially the economic. In fact, it does not only provide a considerable contribution to their economy but also creates jobs for themselves and next generation. Furthermore, it helps promote the national culture. Nevertheless , the goverment should take action to conserve and develop the environment and natural resources by force tourists pay more taxies. One possibility is that government should emphasise and publicise the benefits of tourism widely on media which help people to understand the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages.

In conclusion, tourism provide a lot of profits but also created many negative impacts. There for, the goverment must take action to minimize the adverse effects so the benefits will be greater. 

260 words

Answer 1

It is a (typo hả cậu) argued that international tourism is bad for countries.

Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country.

Đây là câu đề bài, có thể nhận thấy là cậu pharaphase ko tốt lắm + lặp lại từ. => Ko hoàn thành được nhiệm vụ.

Suggestions:

bad for = have an adverse effect on.

countries = nation, region 

What are the reasons? Solutions to change negative attitudes

In this essay, i will explain and suggest some measures for this issue. 

Thesis statement của cậu ko tốt. explain what? Đề bài yêu cầu what are the reasons and solution thì cậu nên nói cả 2 phần này vào thesis statement. 

issue = dilemma, quandary, predicament

On the one hand, some people think tourism has negative affects to the environment and the landscape. 

affect là động từ cậu ạ. => effect on. hoặc affects negatively. 

 

Firstly, they believed that tourism is the cause of traffic emission, ( vehicle emission) noise pollution and resources wasted. ( wasted resources)

 

For example, the traffics for travellers (??? not make sense) are the root of the climate changes include ( including) air pollution, noise pollution. 

=> Cái này k phải là example, nó thiên về explanation nhiều hơn. 

 

As a result, plane exhaust has a significant effect to ( effect on ) the Earth warming.( global warming; the warming of the Earth) 

 

Secondly, tourism could damage (suggestion: undermine)  the ecological. ( ecological balance, ecological system) 

Đây là 1 câu đơn, cậu có thể chuyển nó thành câu phức để đa dạng hóa các câu trong bài làm của mình. 

 

Construction of road and campsites could prevent wild animals from finding their food . ( lead to a shortage of food supplying for wild anmials) 

 

Finally, tourism is the cause of the rise of pollution and emission.

Mình nghĩ 2 ý là đủ rồi cậu ạ, cậu thêm ý này nó lại na ná ý thứ nhất. 

 

 

 

Answer 2

On the other hand, there are some opinions that tourism provides a large number of benefits, especially the economic ( especially for ~ ) 

 

In fact, it does not only provide ( provides) a considerable contribution to their economy but also creates jobs for themselves and next generation. 

Create job là bao gồm contribution to economy rồi cậu. not only và but also nói về 2 ý hoàn toàn khác nhau. 

 

Furthermore, it helps promote the national culture. 

Nếu cậu viết 1 ý mới, cậu bắt buộc phải support nó, nếu ko thì đừng viết. 

 

Nevertheless , the goverment should take action to conserve and develop the environment and natural resources by force tourists pay more taxies. ( forcing tourists to pay more taxies) 

 

One possibility is that government should emphasise and publicise the benefits of tourism widely on media ( on the media) , which help ( helps, encourages, boosts, awakes) people to understand ( discern, perceive) the advantages( pros, convenience, merits )  far outweigh the disadvantages (cons, drawbacks, stumbling block, obstacle, demerits)   

 

 

In conclusion, tourism provide (provides) a lot of profits but also created ( creates) many negative ( unfavorable) impacts. 

 

There for( therefore) , the goverment must take action( repeat words => practice laws) to minimize the adverse effects (outcomes) so the benefits will be greater 

 

Bài làm của cậu dao động trong khoảng 5 => 5.5. Tất cả những điều mình viết đây đều là ý kiến cá nhân, có thể sai sót. Chúc bạn học tốt.