Question

Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

In recent years, there is circling an argument that students in bachelor could be animated to comment or criticize their teachers in order to make better the educational condition. Though I have to accept that by doing this, the respect and discipline in the classroom could be broken down, but I still believe that this could be one of the measures to increase the quality of education.

 First, it is seem to me that everything has double effects. The negative result of giving faculty to students to comment or even criticize their teacher without a limit is that it could cause lack of respect and discipline in the classroom. For example, with this tool in the hands, some students will feel like a boss of their teacher and they probably abuse this power to put their teacher under a high pressure, and even control them. In turn, the teachers, to avoid criticism, would not punish the student’s bad behave.

However, if the students could present their opinions about how they would like the lesson developed, it will be very useful for the teacher. Basing on the student’s approach, the teacher could find out a good way to make their lectures more alive and then could attract student’s attention. As an illustration, the students could indicate that they feel boring with the nonstop talking class of history, and they would like to see a video or visit o museum instead of it. As a result, the teacher could organize an excursion considering the student’s idea. By doing this, the history class could become much more interesting.

In conclusion, a constructive comment of the students on their teachers could be certainly a way to get better the educational quality.

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Answer 1

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 First, it is seem to me that everything has double effects. The negative result of giving faculty to students to comment or even criticize their teacher without a limit is that it could cause lack of respect and discipline in the classroom. For example, with this tool in their hands, some students will feel like thea boss of their teachers and they would probably abuse this power to put their teachers under a high pressure, and even control them. In turn, the teachers, to avoid criticism, would not punish the student’s bad behaviore.

However, if the students could present their opinions about how they would like the lesson developed, it will be very useful for the teacher. Baseding on the student’s approach, the teacher could figurend out a good way to make their lectures more alive and then, they could attract student’s’ attention. As an illustration, the students could indicate that they feel boreding with the nonstop talking inclass of historyclass, and they would like to see a video or visit ao museum instead of it. As a result, the teacher could organize an excursion after considering the student’s idea. By doing this, the history class could become much more interesting.

In conclusion, a constructive comment byof the students on their teachers could be certainly be a way to get better the educational quality.

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Task achievement: 8

Coherence and cohesion: 7

Lexical resources: 7

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Bài viết có ý tưởng hay, cần chú ý về lỗi từ vựng: based on, allowed to, comment on,…

Cũng cần lưu ý thêm về cách triển khai câu: ngắn gọn và cô đọng, mặc dù có ý tưởng hay nhưng câu trong bài còn dài dòng và chưa được smooth.

Ngoài ra, bài viết cũng cần chú ý thêm về cách dùng mạo từ: a, the, e.g: visit a museum, educational conditions, the boss of their teachers.