Bài IELTS Task1. The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. [closed]

Question

The line graph reveals rate of birth comparing in China and USA in eight decades from 1920 to 2000. The trend is of both countries are similar.

Overall, in China and American had the same speed of birth during the period. In China was slight increasing about 11 lower than USA was 13 in 1920. The rate of birth reduced about 10 of China and USA was 13 in 1925. Both of China and USA rose in 1930 but the China was growing to 15 faster than USA was 13 in 1935. Amount of birth in China dramatically fell to 5 in 1940 and decreased about 5 in 1945. It was rapidly growing as peak in 1955 and in China was 20 taller than American was 15. Then the number of birth surprisingly went down in 1955 of China and got 2 lower than USA steady collapsed 7 until 2000. Amount of birth in both countries are none different during the period time.

Answer 1

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The line graph reveals rate of birth comparing in China and USA in eight decades from 1920 to 2000. The trend is of both countries are similar. ( cái này khá giống over trend đấy nhưng ko có đề nên cũng chả nhận xét đc)

The line graph shows changes in the rate of birth in China and the USA during the period 1920-2000

Overall, in China and American had the same speed of birth during the period. In China was slight increasing about 11 lower than USA was 13 in 1920. The rate of birth reduced ( fell, dropped, declined) about 10 of China and USA was 13 in 1925. Both of China and USA rose in 1930 but the China was growing to 15 faster than USA was 13 in 1935. Amount of birth in China dramatically fell to 5 in 1940 and decreased about 5 in 1945. It was rapidly growing as peak in 1955 and in China was 20 taller than American was 15. Then the number of birth surprisingly went down in 1955 of China and got 2 lower than USA steady collapsed 7 until 2000. Amount of birth in both countries are none different during the period time.

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Answer 2

reveals=> shows , illustrates ....: từ reveals mình thấy nghĩa ko phù hợp lắm :D 

The trend is of both countries

 In China was => the figures for china .... : Nếu nói In china ko thì sai nhé bạn , tương tự cho "Both of China and USA" 

The rate of birth reduced=> was reduced : vì nghĩa từ reduce là giảm , mà cái tỷ lệ thì ko tự giảm dc nên phải có tobe 

Amount of birth in both countries are  :   chú ý thì nha bạn 

Bạn nên chuẩn bị sẵn vài từ nối : ko nên dùng and ,but , then nhiều , hãy tìm hiểu dùng cấu trúc khác nhé vd Ving để nối các hoạt động xảy ra liên tiếp .... 

P/s : Ý kiến cá nhân của mình thôi :D . Good night 

 

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