BÀI writing task1 11/04

Question

Relic Con Son - Kiep Bac is one of 62 national monuments are particularly important in Vietnam. Its locate is in the Chi Linh town Hai Duong province. It includes the population of the historic relation to the glorious victories in three military people Tran defeated the Mongol invaders in the thirteenth century and the 10-year war of insurgents against the Ming Lam Son in the fifteenth century. This is the place associated with the life, the career of the national hero Nguyen Trai, Tran Hung Dao, along with a list of the nation's culture: Tran Nguyen Dan, French Speakers, Huyen Quang .. Con Son is a gravel mountain about 200 meters high and 238-meter northern ridge adjoins Ngu Nhac Mountain, the peak mountain look like a unicorn kneeling, so its name is Ky Lan . Con Son pagoda was built in the 13th century and repaired with more intricate features in the 17th and 18th centuries and include 83 rooms with 385 statues; some of which are the hight of two to three meters. A-di-da statue is the first statue to come in to sight with 3 meters. Truc Lam statue located behind the pagoda under the path leading to the mountain and below the green canopy of large tree On the way up Ky Lan Mountain, the visitors can call at Gieng Ngoc , known as the eye of the Ky Lan in the foot of Dang Minh Bao Thap. At the peak is Am Bach Van where the hero Nguyen Trai lived at the end of his life. Next to it is Ban Co Tien and several other large flagstones called "immortal chessboards" by local residents. Some kilometers to the west is Kiep Bac Temple, the estate and garrisoning camp of Tran Hung Dao after the first victory over the Yuan invaders in 1258. Every year from the 15th to 20th days of the eighth lunar month, tens of thousands of people throughout the country come here to attend the Kiep Bac

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