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Đề bài: Deforestation caused by human activities in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think that can be done for the environment?

Recently, logging has made a noticeable concern among scientists and human beings as the overgrowth of cutting down trees , for commercial and agricultural purpose, have arised myriad issues with regard to our habitat environment. I am going to highlight some possible solutions in response to it.

Clearly, wood brings us numerous advantages such as making paper, funiturism, artefacts, etc. It is hard for us not to keep felling trees due to the fact that it have inserted a vital influence to many fields of industry. We can recycle and reuse paper, books, novels, carton, wood floor, wood furniture, we cannot decrease our utilisation of wood notwithstanding.

Moreover, apart from logging, we need to associate every our human activities with planting and taking care of vegetation.
In Vietnam, schools let their students give care to plants around the schoolyard. Also, teenagers and volunteers usually ask people for their volunteery to grow tress and water flowers in public.
One more thing we need to mention that owing to the in irresistible valuable of forest, over logging is inevitable. Every country’s government shoud prohibit this illegal action and fine heavily someone who do not obey the regulation. More forester and more guards is an efficient way I wan to recommend to countries all around the word.

Besides, we need to inform famers in the countryside, who fire forest for agricultural purpose, about the disadvantages of fire destruction because it is not without untold harm to our evironment.

In conclusion, as individuals, we ought to step our effort to inhibit actions that have negative effects to forest. When vegetation vanish, human will be on the brink of extinction.
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Recently, logging has made a noticeable concern among scientists and human beings -->  humans as the overgrowth of cutting down trees , for commercial and agricultural purpose, have arised myriad of issues with regard to our habitat environment. I am going to highlight some possible solutions in response to it.

Clearly, wood brings us numerous advantages such as making paper, funiturism, -->  furniture, artefacts, etc. It is hard for us not to keep felling trees -->  to stop cutting trees due to the fact that it have -->  has inserted a vital influence to many fields of industry. We can recycle and reuse paper, books, novels, carton, wood floor, wood furniture, we cannot decrease our utilization of wood notwithstanding.

Moreover, apart from logging, we need to associate every our human activities with planting and taking care of vegetation.
In Vietnam, schools let their students give care to -->  for plants around the schoolyard. Also, teenagers and volunteers usually ask people for their volunteery to grow tress and water flowers -->  plan trees and flowers in public areas.

One more thing we need to mention that owing to the in irresistible valuable --> significant value of forest, over logging is inevitable. Every country’s government shoud -->  should prohibit this illegal action and fine heavily -->  issue serious sentences for someone who do not obey the regulation. More foresters and more guards is -->  are an efficient way I wan –> want to recommend to countries all around the word.

Besides, we need to inform famers in the countryside, who fire forest for agricultural purpose, about the disadvantages of fire destruction because it is not without untold harm to our evironment.

In conclusion, as individuals, we ought to step our effort to inhibit actions that have negative effects to forest. When vegetation vanish, human will be on the brink of extinction.

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