IELTS task 1: The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Question

Given is a multiple line graph that shows the changes in the amounts of wheat exported in Australia, Canada and an European community. Overall, while the European area witnessed a slight rise, an downward trend was seen in Australia, and there were fluctuations in the number of wheat exports in the country of maple trees.

As is illustrated in the graph, the figure of wheat spread oversea in Australia grew slightly from 15 million tons to about 16 million tons in the beginning period, but then slipped back to 14 million tons in 1987. On the contrary, during the same first two years, an opposite trend was seen in other countries. To specify, there were gradual declines from 19 million tons to 17 million tons, and from 17 million tons to 14 million tons in Canada and the European community respectively in the first year period. Over one year later, both areas experienced an increase to 21 million tons in Canada and just under 15 million tons in the European community.

In the last three years, each country underwent a different trend. As for Canada, the amount of wheat transferred abroad continually climbed and reached a peak at 25 million tons in 1988, then suddenly deteriorated to under 15 million tons in the next year before surging again and ending with the same number as in its first year. When it comes to the European region, the levelling out at 15 million tons was noticed from 1987 to 1988, following by a remarkable growth to 21 million tons over the last two years. In Australia, however, after dipping gradually to around 14 million tons in 1989, the figure remained stable until 1990.

 

Answer 1

Given is a multiple line graph that shows-----> the given chart illustrates....... during 1985-1990 period ( thêm năm vào cho nó đầy đủ và dài câu ra)

As is illustrated in the graph (cậu dùng câu nào cũng được nhưng mà nên  để illutraste ở trên thì sẽ đc điểm cao hơn)-----> it can be seen clearly from the chart is that........

Overall------------> the most outstanding feature of the chart is that ......the number of wheat exports---> exported( ở task 1 thì gần như tất cả những thì phải để ở quá khứ) in maple trees-----> canada ( task 1 chỉ yêu cầy miêu tả biểu đồ nên là k đc cho quan điểm hay tự ý thay đỏi như thế (lỗi 1))

during the same first two years---->during the first two years

To specify-------> bỏ. lại lỗi như maple trees ấy

To specify, there were gradual declines from 19 million tons to 17 million tons, and from 17 million tons to 14 million tons in Canada and the European community respectively in the first year period. Over one year later, both areas experienced an increase to 21 million tons in Canada and just under 15 million tons in the European community.--------> đừng có mà ăn cả như vậy chia làm 3 đoạn văn rõ ràng mỗi đoạn miêu tả 1 nc thì người chấm mới dễ follow hơn.

underwent a different trend----->underwent different trends

 deteriorated to under 15 million tons in the next year before surging again and ending with the same number as in its first year (lỗi 1)

When it comes to the European region ( lỗi 1)

there was a leveling out in the figure for european with 15 million tonnes between 1987 and 1988 which was followed by( nếu tiếp tục tăng), which was led to( nếu giảm)+ n phrase

dipping ---- fell, decreased, dropped, declined.........

bài làm thiếu sự mạch lạc, sai ngữ pháp rất nhiều, cho rất nhiều quan điểm cá nhân-----> làm ng đọc khó follow.

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Answer 2

The given line chart compares the mount of wheat exported in three regional areas, namely Australia, Canada and European community over a half decade from 1985 to 1990.

It can be clearly seen that the largest amount of wheat exported was from European countries in 1990 while the figure for Canada fall to the second place among three surveyed areas in 1988.

The amount of wheat exported from Canada reached its peak of 25 million tonnes ( 25 units) over the period after a slightly decrease from 19 units to 17 units in 1985 and 1986, respectively. Subsequently , Canadian wheat exports dropped dramatically to its lowest level of 14 units before recovering to its initial level in 1985. The European wheat exports fell from under 17 units in 1985 to 13 units in 1986. This trend did not last long when this amount gradually grew to more than 17 units, surpassed the counter one from Canada in 1988, then becoming the most popular exporter among three sellers.

The figure for Australia increased from 15 units to 16 units for the first one year and then continuously falling to over 11 units in 1989 and remaining at that level.

Comments

bạn nên paraphrase lại từ wheat exported nhé
overview mình nghĩ nên nêu tổng quan sự tăng giảm của 3 cái+ điểm peak của canada năm 88
mount=>amount
body nên chia thành 2 đoạn: 1985-1986 và 1986-1990
bạn dùng bị lặp nhiều cấu trúc kiểu: from 19 units to 17 units in 1985 and 1986

Answer 3

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The three graphs of wheat exports each show a quite different pattern between 1985 and 1990. Exports from Australia declined over the five-year period, while the Canadian market fluctuated considerably, and the European Community showed an increase.

In 1985, Australia exported about 15 millions of tonnes of wheat and the following year the number increased by one million tonnes to 16 million. After that, however, there was a gradual decline until 1989 and 1990 when it stabilised at about 11 million tonnes. Over the same period, the amount of Canadian exports varied greatly. It started at 19 million tonnes in 1985, reached a peak in 1988 of 24 million, dropped dramatically in 1989 to 14 million tonnes and then climbed back to 19 million in 1990. Seventeen million tonnes were exported from the European Community in 1985, but this decreased to 14 million tonnes in 1986 and then rose to 15 million in 1987 and 1988 before increasing once more to 20 million in 1990.

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