IELTS task1_test 1_ Cambridge 5

Question

A glace at the graph provided reveals the percentage of 65 and over age population for a period of 100 years, from 1940 to 2040. In Japan, sweden 2 USA. It is evident that there is a gap between the proportion of populataion in sweden as well as USA and that of Japan. And, overall, the three country showed an upward trend during the whole period.

In 1940, USA occupied the highest percentage of the populatation aged 65 and more making up about 9%, followed by the percentage of prominent in that  age group of the population, which is nearly as half as that of USA.

In 1960, the percentage of population of Japan bottomed out at approximately 3% and remained steady until 1990. On contrary the other two countries, sweden and USA remained an significant incrase population in sweden exceeded that of USA and expected  to finished the time scale at 25% in 2040.

Remarkably, Japan's percentage of population is predicted to grow exponentially in 2028 until it surpassed the other two countries as well as is anticipated to ranked in the first place accounting for over 27% in 2040.

In conclusion, Japan seems to have more elderly population in the future and the figures in USA is verse serce.

Answer 1

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