Cam 10 bar chart: HELP ME!!!!!!

Question

   The bar chart given illustrates the proportion of British citizens of different ages made charitable donation between 1990 and 2010.

   Generally speaking, more British people donated money in 1990 than in 2010. However, the pattern alters with people who aged above 50 across the 2 years.

   The greatest percentage of people donating money to charity was the age group 36-50 with 40% in 1990 while in 2010 the figure declined to around 35%. The age group 18-25 was the smallest contribution with only 17% in 1990 then fell two-thirds in 2010, a decrease of around 10%. Meanwhile, the proportion of people donating to charity aged from 26-35 saw a drop from over 30% in 1990 to fewer than 25% in 2010.

    Conversely, more people aged above 50 gave money to charity in 2010 than in 1990. A mere approximately 35% of 51-65 age group made the donation in 1990 while the percentage of this group was up to around 40% 20 years later, which was the highest for 2010. Likewise, the figure for the age group above 65 witnessed a one-sixth rise from just over 30% to 35% respectively.

 

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Answer 1

The bar chart given(given chart) illustrates the proportion of British citizens( từ British đã là người anh rồi nên không cần dùn "citizen") of different ages made charitable donation between 1990 and 2010.

   Generally speaking, more British people donated money in 1990 than in 2010. However, the pattern alters with people who aged above 50 across the 2 years.

   The greatest percentage of people donating money to charity was the age group 36-50 with 40% in 1990 while in 2010 the figure declined to around 35%. The age group 18-25 was the smallest contribution with only 17% in 1990 then fell two-thirds in 2010, a decrease of around 10%. Meanwhile, the proportion of people donating to charity aged from 26-35 saw a drop from over 30% in 1990 to fewer than 25% in 2010.

    Conversely, more people aged above 50 gave money to charity in 2010 than in 1990. A mere approximately 35% of 51-65 age group made the donation in 1990 while the percentage of this group was up to around 40% 20 years later, which was the highest for 2010. Likewise, the figure for the age group above 65 witnessed a one-sixth rise from just over 30% to 35% respectively.

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Answer 2

The bar chart given illustrates the proportion of British citizens of different ages made charitable donation between 1990 and 2010.

   Generally speaking, more British people donated money in 1990 than that in 2010. However, the pattern alters (altered) with people who aged above 50 across the 2 years (“two” instead of 2).

   The greatest percentage of people donating money to charity was the age group 36-50 with 40% in 1990 while in 2010 the figure declined to around 35% (I think it should be “however” instead of “while” as the two actions happened consequently, not at the same time). The age group 18-25 was the smallest contribution with only 17% in 1990 then fell two-thirds in 2010, a decrease of around 10%. Meanwhile, the proportion of people donating to charity aged from 26-35 saw a drop from over 30% in 1990 to fewer than 25% in 2010.

    Conversely, more people aged above 50 gave money to charity in 2010 than that in 1990. A mere approximately 35% of 51-65 age group made the donation in 1990 while (once again, I think you should not use “while” here as the two actions did not happen at the same time. Maybe you can use “whereas” instead)  the percentage of this group was up to around 40% 20 years later (after 20 years), which was the highest for 2010. Likewise, the figure for the age group above 65 witnessed a one-sixth rise from just over 30% to 35% respectively (do not use respectively here).