The tourism industry has grown enormously over the last 50 years, and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Question

With all the technology development human beings have made during the last century, people nowadays can easily access to hi-tech services and devices. Internet is now easier to access, phones are cheaper to buy and more modern to use, traveling by trains and airplanes is also more affordable. This may be the reason why a growing number of people decide to travel across the world, which results in the development of the tourism industry. While the majority agrees that tourism has a good impact on nations’ economy, there’s still some opinions that the country where tourists visit hardly ever gain any benefits from travelers. However, I strongly support the idea that tourist actually enrich the destination country, in both economic and cultural aspects.

 

First of all, tourism is one of the most important factors which make a country’s economy grow. If a developing can attract tourists from all over the world, especially those from developed countries, its local people will be able to have more chances in gaining a higher income by doing tourism services, such as opening a hotel or selling local food or drinks to tourists. For instance, Thailand’s GDP has grown by more than 3 times compared to the figure in 1990 when its government first provided to local companies to develop its own tourism industry. A closer example is in a seaside village in Nha Trang. In the 90s, the only job the villagers could do for a living is catching fish to sell for markets. This kind of work required lots of hard work but gained just a little income. Luckily, the lives of people there had changed gradually due to the visit of tourists from other parts of Vietnam and of the world. Its villagers then can make a living by selling seaside souvenirs of guiding the tourist around the village. Their lives had changed in a better way.

 

Tourism brings not only economic growth but also cultural benefits to the country. When a traveler comes to a country, he or she not only visit beautiful places but also learns about these places’ history and patterns. This way the nation’s culture will be spread widely over the world. I remember once my high school friend who is currently studying abroad told me a story of her first day at new school in Vancouver. When she introduced herself Vietnamese. One of her classmates asked her why she hadn’t worn Ao Dai. He said that he had visited Vietnam once, and he had learnt so much things about Vietnam during this trip, such as Vietnam’s traditional dress – Ao Dai, or Vietnam’s meal – full of rice and vegetable.

 

However, we can’t deny the fact that along with good impacts, there are still some drawbacks of tourism. Environmental pollution is one of the most standing problems. Many tourist don’t put garbage in the right place. Instead, they throw them on the street, which destroys the beauty of the street view. Besides, increasing number of tourist may result in increasing number of illegal immigrations, which endangers the safety of the countries’ civil.

 

In conclusion, despite some disadvantages, tourism has brought a lot of benefits to the country in which travelers visit. I strongly believe that is one country want to develop their economy and spread their culture, investing on tourist is the best solution.

Answer 1

Introduction:

“more modern to use”-> “more modern to experience”

“while the majority agrees” -> “while the majority agree”

“there’s still opinions” -> “there are still opinions”

“tourists actually enrich” -> “tourism actually enriches”

“destination country” -> “attractive countries”

1^st argument:

“If a developing can” -> “If a developing country can attract”

“by doing tourism services” -> “by doing touristic services”

“its government first provided to local companies to develop its own tourism industry” -> “its government first supported local touristic complanies”

“could do for living is” -> “could do to earn living was”

“the lives of people” -> “the standard of living”

“due to the visit of tourists” -> “due to the increasing number of tourists visiting this place”

“Their lives had changed” -> “Their lives have changed”

2^nd argument:

“he or she not only visit” -> “he or she not only visits”

“When she introduced herself Vietnamese. One” -> “when she introduced herself Vietnamese, one”

“so much things” -> “so much”

“during this trip” -> “during that trip”

“Vietnam’s meal” -> “Vietnamese dishes”

Last sentence suggested: Therefore, one tourist can actually introduce a country’s image to others.

3^rd argument:

“Many tourist don’t put garbage in the right place” -> “Many tourists litter a lot”

Comments:

-good writing, logical arguments

-should bring the 3rd argument to the top