Some people believe that higher education should be funded by the government. Other, however. Argue that it is the responsibility of individuals to fund their higher education. Discuss

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People have different view about who should pray for tertiary education. Although there are a good arguments in favour of the government paying for the higher education, I personally believe that it is responsibility of individuals to pay their way through university.

          On the one hand, it can be argued that the government should pay for university education and after graduating, students have responsibility to develop the home country. For instance, postgraduated students can work for the offices or enterprises of government for 2 years to paying the their fee in  university.with the free high educatin policies, poor alumnies can have opportunities to obtain academic knowledge and government also receive lots of benefits from these students.

          On the other hand, there are people who believe that individuals rather than goverments should pay for university. I share this opinion for several reasons. Firstly, students can choose the universities which they think accordant and they can afford fees. The universitis, which requires high fees, often have academic quality with lots of equipment and experters that the government universities may not have. After graduating, individuals can work for company or government with the suitable salary. Morever, they can build the enterprise for themselves if they have enough aptitutea and finance.

          To conclude, it seems to me that it is the responsibility of students to fund their university education. However, I strongly recommentd that goverments should provide easy and affordable loans to adolescents wishing to go to university.

Answer 1

bạn ơi đề discuss thì có lẽ không nên dùng câu này "I personally believe that it is responsibility of individuals to pay their way through university" ở đầu đoạn bạn ạ

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Answer 2

Dear Vando2810,

I do hope that you dont loath me for my comments as below:

People have different view (Grammar-plural)  about who should pray (spelling mistake) for tertiary education. Although there are a good arguments (grammar) in favour of the government paying for the higher education, I personally believe that it is responsibility of individuals to pay their way through university. (This sentence is not suitable for a discussing essay. Your essay should not give any opinion for this because they don’t ask you to give your opinion)

          On the one hand, it can be argued that the government should pay for university education and after graduating, students have responsibility to develop the home country.(Wrong grammar, running sentence)For instance, postgraduated students  (Wrong words) can work for the offices or enterprises of government (no article, grammar) for 2 years to paying (Grammar) the their fee (grammar) in  university.with (ah ha grammar again) the free high educatin (Spelling) policies, poor alumnies (Spelling-grammar) can have opportunities to obtain academic knowledge and government (Article) also receive lots of benefits from these students.

          On the other hand, there are people who believe that individuals rather than goverments should pay for university (Awkward). I share this opinion for several reasons. (You are sharing, why do you need to talk about this truth) Firstly, students can choose the universities which they think accordant and they can afford fees.( I think you may write it like that: A student has a variety of choices to enter the university appropriate to his or her financial status)The universities (spelling), which requires high fees, often have academic quality with lots of equipment and experters (Vocabulary) that the government universities may not have. (Which is the subject, the government or the university? Overall I don’t understand your point) After graduating, individuals (vocabulary-you may use other words suitable for this situation) can work for company or government with the suitable salary. Morever,(spelling) they can build the enterprise for themselves if they have enough aptitutea(spelling) and finance.

          To conclude, it seems to me that it is the responsibility of students to fund (vocabulary) their university education. However, I strongly recommentd (spelling) that goverments (spelling) should provide easy and affordable loans to adolescents (ah ha only for adolescents, I am just kidding) wishing to go to university. (again no conclusion for discussion without asking your opinion)

I hope this can help you some points.

Best regards,

Tam

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Answer 3

Bài viết có hỏi opinion không vậy. Nếu không hỏi thì bạn đừng trả lời nhé sẽ mất điểm Task reponse. Bạn chú ý về số nhiều số ít different view=> views; there are good arguments ( mà sao lại dùng good nhỉ :D).  Bạn hơi ít ideas nhưng lại triển khai ideas tốt. Không dùng "lots of" vì informal. Nhìn chung bạn đáp ứng yêu cầu của bài academic writing. Chia đoạn rõ ràng rành mạch, bố cục bài tốt. Congrats yeahhhhhhh 

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