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Đề: Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

 

There are an increasing number of trip in recent years, it shows that making trips is a popular trend in recent years. People choose travelling when they have free time because of many reasons. This essay will mention about these cases that someone usually take a trip and also these benefits for travelers.

Occasions that the public travel are so variety.  First of all, this time is holiday, therefore they must not work at office or study at school. Especially, with some families in city, this is a best opportunity to take the time for caring each other; however, city is not only narrow, but also lack of fascinating things. Hence, they want to take a trip to change the environment for taking a rest together. In addition, with most people who usually under a high pressure from job, and/or they have mental problems, they wound like taking a rest by travelling, the former for visiting and discovering, and the latter for curing illness. For example, to be not bother by employment, experiencing a trip to far place which is clear atmosphere and peace space is a great chosen.

So traveler can receive advantages from travelling? Firstly, through these discovering, they will expand their knowledge about many aspects, such as culture, culinary or nature. There is no doubt that each area contains different factors that are gravitated people. For instance, in my country, Sa-pa is a sites in which still remain traditional value and have not been urbanization; moreover, Sa-pa also have snow on some months per years. Secondly, when someone takes a trip with their friends or family, they will have more chances to make conversations and understand each other to make this relationship more connectively.

Overall, there are many occasion to travel and people should take advantage of it for their aims. However, travelers also regard to safety of each trip.

 

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- There are -> there has been

- is a popular trend -> has become a popular trend

- mention about these case -> mention the cases

- these benefits for travellers -> major benefits of travelling ("these" means that they have been mention before and in this case it haven't, so you can't use "these"; "major" is more detailed and academic)

- are so variety -> vary widely/are varied (don't use "so" in writing, and variety is not an adjective)

 

 

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There are an increasing number of trips in recent years, it shows that making trips->travelling is a popular trend in recent years-> in today social. People choose travelling when they have free time because of many reasons. This essay will mention about these cases that someone usually take a trip and also these benefits for travelers.

Occasions that the public travel are so variety->various.  First of all, this time is holiday, therefore they must not work at office or study at school. Especially, with some families in city, this is a best opportunity to take-> spend their time for caring each other; however, city is not only narrow, but also lack of fascinating things. Hence, they want to take a trip to change the environment for taking a rest together. In addition, with most people who usually work under a high pressure or have mental problems want to take a rest by travelling, the former for visiting and discovering, and the latter for curing illness. For example, to be not bother by employment, experiencing a trip to far place which is clear atmosphere and peace space is a great chosen.

So traveler can receive advantages from travelling? Firstly, through these discovering, they will expand their knowledge about many aspects, such as culture, culinary or nature. There is no doubt that each area contains different factors that are gravitated-> attracts people. For instance, in my country, Sa-pa is a sites in which still remain traditional value and have not been urbanization; moreover, Sa-pa also have snow on some months per years. Secondly, when someone takes a trip with their friends or family, they will have more chances to make conversations and understand each other to make this relationship more connectively->connective.

Overall, there are many occasion-> occasions to travel and people should take advantage->advantages of it for their aims. However, travelers also regard to safety of each trip.

 

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For instance, in my country, Sa-pa is a sites -> site in which -> which still remain -> remains traditional value -> traditional values and have not been urbanization-> urbanized; moreover, Sa-pa also have->has snow on some months per years->each year.

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