IELTS Book 13 test 3 task 1 - Top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014 [closed]

Question

The given graph compares the amount of electricity manufactured and

consumed by top ten nations in 2014

Overall, the generation of electricity was slightly higher than that of

consumption in almost nations,except for Germany.Another striking feature is

that the production and consumption of electricity in China and the US was

significantly higher than the figures for other countries.

In detail, the amount of electricity manufactured and consumed by China

was the highest , at 5,398 billion kWh for the former and 5,322 billion kWh for the

latter.This figure followed by the United States with 4,099 billion kWh and 3,866

billion kWh respectively.

Regarding the remain countries , Russia was the only nation with electricity

generation and consumption being just over 1,000 billion kWh. These followers

were Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil, its range was from 455,8 to 936,2

billion kWh.It is also noticeable that the figure for consuming was insignificantly

higher than its manufacturing in Germany. Korea was ranked as lowest country in

the chart, it just created 485,1 billion kWh and consumed roughly 449 billion kWh.

Answer 1

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The given graph compares the amount of electricity generated manufactured and

consumed by top ten nations in 2014. 

Overall, the generation of electricity was slightly higher than that of

consumption in almost all nations, except for Germany. Another striking feature is

that the production and consumption of electricity in China and the US were was

significantly higher than the figures for other countries.

In detail, the amount of electricity generated manufactured and used consumed by China

was the highest , at 5,398 billion kWh for the former and 5,322 billion kWh, respectively. for the

latter.This figure was followed by the United States with 4,099 billion kWh produced and 3,866

billion kWh consumed respectively.

Regarding the remaining countries , Russia was the only nation with electricity

generation and consumption being just over 1,000 billion kWh. These followers

were Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil, with the electricity amount ranging its range was from 455,8 to 936,2 billion kWh. Following the same trend, Korea was ranked as lowest country in

the chart, it just the country only created 485,1 billion kWh and consumed roughly 449 billion kWh in 2014. On the other hand, it is also noticeable that the figure for electricity usage, 582.5 kWh, consuming was insignificantly higher than its production, 526.6 kWh, manufacturing in Germany.

Comments

   The given graph( thể loại graph là gì)- horizontal bar chart compares the amount of electricity generated manufactured and

consumed (by) in terms of top ten nations in 2014. 

   Overall, the generation of electricity was slightly higher than that of

consumption in almost all nations, except for Germany. (Another striking feature is

that) Noteably ,the production and consumption of electricity in China and the US were was

significantly higher than the figures for other countries.

   (In detail) As can be observed, the amount of electricity generated manufactured and used consumed by China

(was the highest , at) reached the highest point of 5,398 billion kWh for the former and 5,322 billion kWh, respectively. for the

latter.This figure was followed by the United States with 4,099 billion kWh produced and 3,866

billion kWh consumed respectively.

   Regarding the remaining countries , Russia was the only nation with electricity

generation and consumption being just over 1,000 billion kWh. These followers

were Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil, with the electricity amount ranging its range was from 455,8 to 936,2 billion kWh. Following the same trend, Korea was ranked as lowest country in

the chart, it just the country only created 485,1 billion kWh and consumed roughly 449 billion kWh in 2014. On the other hand, it is also noticeable that the figure for electricity usage, 582.5 kWh, consuming was insignificantly higher than its production, 526.6 kWh, manufacturing in Germany.