Đề thi Task 2 Ielts 2/10 - Government funding for university should only be used to provide scholarship for the best students...
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Task 2: Government funding for university should only be used to provide scholarship for the best students. The other funding for universities should come from student fees and private organisations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

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Task 2: Government funding for university should only be used to provide scholarship for the best students. The other funding for universities should come from student fees and private organisations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Nowadays, chances to study at a university is open to everybody. Some universities have been funded by government, commercial companies and other sources. These funds are usually used to offer scholarships for excellent students. This essay will discuss why funds from government should not only use for scholarships because of increasing student fees, lack of funding sources and affecting to other students’ activities.

 

Firstly, using all finance from government offering scholarships increases student fees. For example, excluding money from government, universities require more money to operate such as calling sponsors or increasing student fees. Furthermore, this will be increasing fees that student has to pay to study. Therefore, studying fees will be increased.

 

Secondly, lack of funding sources is one of reasons that all government resources do not use to give studentships only. For instance, operating a university expects a great deal of money. Without using government finance, universities have to attract more supports from other sources such as business corporations. However, there are not all colleges having good relationships enough to raise funds. The support is only established if the university is able to offer benefits to these organisations. Consequently, other financial sources are not always available for all universities.

 

Finally, activities for other students are reduced because of limited resources. In addition, if a part of money is used to offer awards, the rest using for university events, meeting, parties or other students’ activities will be reducing. Furthermore, the social activities of university is less attractive leading to less student joining. As a consequence, using government funds for scholarship purpose only affects other students’ activities.

 

In conclusion, funding from government to offer scholarships only provides many disadvantages such as the raising of student payments, reducing university operations and dropping student’s events. All financial sources should be issued to different operations rather than excluding government funding for scholarships. In the future, universities will looking forward to inviting more funding sources to improve their operations.

 
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Có ai chữa giúp mình bài ở trên không :-( ?
Tớ mạo muộn góp ý thế này nhé!
1. Về idea, t thấy các idea chưa rõ ràng lắm! Nếu là mình, mình sẽ viết theo kiểu, mình ko đồng ý với quan điểm này và đưa ra luận điểm như sau:
One the one hand, t đưa ra 1 số advantages nhỏ cho opion mà t ko ủng hộ. VD: Goverment scholarship thường lớn hơn private scholarship và mang lại danh tiếng cho người nhận học bổng => more appealing và nhờ thế attract đc nhiều nhân tài hơn cho các trường ĐH...
On the other hand, t sẽ đưa ra luận điểm nhiều hơn là ko ai có thể phủ nhận việc này có sơ số disadvantages. VD: operating expense lớn hơn scholarships, nên cần đặt gánh nặng này lên các tổ chức lớn như goverment chứ ko p là student fees hay private organizations. Bổ sung thêm các luận điểm là nó làm cho hsinh ko cảm thấy khó khăn khi học đại học vì học phí cao, vì bấp bênh về tiềm năng tài chính tương lai của trường khi ko có goverment support, blah blah
Cuối cùng kết luận là mặc dù có 1 số benefits nhưng problems và drawbacks overcome nên mềnh mới có quan điểm như trên
2. Về wording và grammar, t comment nhẹ nhàng thui (vì cũng ko có time soi kỹ)
Nowadays, chances to study at a university (is=> are) open to everybody
Therefore, studying fees will be increased. => câu này hơn bị thừa
Tam thế nhé! hehe

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