Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditionak methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree wwith this opinion

Question

Nowadays, Convenience food is dramatically common in many countries. It is true that food which is prepared appears at most sites where sell food easily such as market, supermarket. So, people can consume this food higher than others. Besides, we can see that family size is declining and increasing single-adult household. Which is a reason for consuming domestic tasks are becoming boring and useless activities for people especially female. Moreover, the number of full-time working mothers is going up day by day and they have a tendency to use convenience foods which take less time to cook.

Although, the utility of junk food require less amount of time in preparation, they are more expensive per serving and less little nutrition vaue than home- made food. Moreover, these foods contain artificial fats and high calories, etc. If people eat a big amount, they can face with serious diseases such as obesity, heart attack, diabetes. Therefore, smart consumer will choose food healthy and find how to cook in their free time instead of buying food contaminated with bacteria and chemicals. On the other hand, the traditional method of food has usualy a significant role of the nation's culture. Traditional cuisine differentiates between the countries. For intance, cooking Chung cake spends more time preparing, Vietnamese would fall short of Tet taste, if they lacked this cake in their Lunar New year.

In sumary, there is a close relation between our way of living and food habits. But, in the near future, it is hard to imagine that traditional food or method of food preparation will disapear and replace it with junk food

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