Bài ielts task 1: " The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000"

Question

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The chart illustrates changes in the birth rates of China and the USA from 1920 to 2000

Overall, it is obvious that the rate of birth in China and the USA decreased between 1920 and 2000. The year 1950 saw hit the highest point in the figure for birth both China and the USA. 

The rate of birth started about 10 in China and started at about 11 in the USA.  From 1940 to 1945, there was maintain unchanged of 5 in the proportion of birth rates in China, while, the figure for the birth dropped to 4 in the USA. The year 1950 witnessed a considerable rise to 15 in the rate of birth in the USA and 20 in the proportion of birth in China.  There was saw a sharp decline in the rate of birth from 1955 to 200. The figure for birth in China and the USA in 2000 were 3 and 7 respectively. 

Answer 1

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"From 1940 to 1945, there was maintain unchanged of 5 in the proportion of birth rates in China, while, the figure for the birth dropped to 4 in the USA." (không phẩy ở đằng sau while)

 

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