Do you Agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money ? Give reasons for your answer

Question

Entertainment is significant in life ,so famous people such as singers ,actors,models who benefit from this field.It is argued that they are paid far too much money .In my opinion, I tend to agree that they deserve a high salary for their  dedication and effort.
   First of all,as other professions,celebrities have to give a lot of time and relentless training effortin the hopes of shinning in the limelight .For example,, Korean trainees who spent many years efforting against  thousands of ones to reserve a debut .Secondly,not everyone has a rich artistic talent that has to go through the process of harsh training ,so that thay can compete in a fast-firing work environment. Therefore,They absolutely deserve be paid a high income for their efforts.
   Another argument in favor of paying a lot of money for the jobs which helps decuation and health of community .In fact, Professions such as teachers,doctors,engineers who have a more stable salary than well-known people.Because they do not have retirement pensions then they get older and the amount of money they receive depends on the number of tickets sold each concert and profit from the music product .While the the new celebrities just appear and the old ones have to try their best to bring the quality end trendy goods in order to maintain their social position.It is undeniable that famous people are influencers who have power in media community to join them and their fans together to help the disadvantages or donate charitable funds.Futher more,the spiritual contributions of celebrities not only help us to relax but also inspire the dynamic.
   In conclusion,I believe that celebrities appropriate be paid far much money for their dedication.Because every occupation is equal,no job is more noble than any one,as long as they work true

Answer 1

- give a lot of time nên thay bằng spend a large amount of time

- mình nghĩ câu đầu của bạn hơi sai sai, dịch ra là: giải trí quan trọng cho nên những người nổi tiếng có lợi ích từ lĩnh vực đó. Có thể sửa thành là

     -> Obviously, entertainment plays an indispensable role in our life, so nobody can deny the importance of well-known people.

- deserve be paid -> deserve to be paid

- go through the process -> experience the process