Goverments in developing countries can best improve people's quality of life by introducing new technology. However, others believe that free education should be offered for all. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Question

There are different views about whether introducing technology or providing free educational system is the best way to improve the quality of lives in developing nations. Despite some positive impacts of free education, I am more in favour of the former.

There are those who argue that free education can raise the standard of lives in poor countries. People can increase their chance of finding a high salary job by accessing to education. A further positive consequence is the low unemployment figures may lead to the decline of crime rate. Therefore, people can enjoy their life without worrying about potential dangers around them.

Despite some advantages mentioned above, I believe that applying new technology is the best measure to improve the quality of lives for citizens in all emerging countries. A good example is the introduction of genes technology in corn plants yields better crops than ever before in many fields in Viet Nam, which also  means that VietNamese farmers can gain an enormous profits from selling their products. In addition, by increasing productivity , economy will also develop, which contributes a lot of money to national budget. Another new technologies should  be applied in energy sector. It is true that the overuse of fossil fuels currently results in serious pollution in our environment . By making green technology such as nuclear power become viable, this will alleviate our dependence on fossil fuel, thus improving air quality and public health.

In conclusion, in spite of some benefits of free education system, I still feel that technology applications is the best way to raise the standard of living in developing countries.

Answer 1

Hello congacon, your essay is very clear, good enough to show your point of view. There is not much to worry about grammars. Just one thing is that when you are talking about technology development, you should focus on making it clearer why technology advancements are better than free education.

- Despite some advantages mentioned above, I believe that applying new technology is the best measure to improve the quality of lives for citizens in all emerging countries. ---> despites some advantages above, the free education can not bring people's lives to a new advancements while technology development can.

- Another new technologies should  be applied in energy sector ---> Another point is that new technology shoudl be applied in the energy sector.

Regards,

Andy

Answer 2

your essay is clear enough to understand but there is a sentence i cann't understand.

 

There are different views about whether introducing (to introduce )technology or providing(to provide) free educational system is the best way to improve the quality of lives in developing nations. Despite some positive impacts of free education, I am more in favour of the former.

There are those who argue that free education can raise (enhance)the standard of lives in poor countries. People can increase their chance(have plenty of chances) of finding a high salary(a well-paid) job by accessing to education. A further positive consequence is the low unemployment figures may lead to the decline of crime rate. Therefore, people can enjoy their life without worrying about potential dangers around them.

Despite some advantages mentioned above, I believe that applying new technology is the best measure to improve the quality of lives for citizens in all emerging countries. A good example is the introduction of genes technology in corn plants yields better crops than ever before in many fields in Viet Nam(this is the sentence i cann't understand), which also  means that VietNamese farmers can gain an enormous profits from selling their products. In addition, by increasing productivity , economy will also develop, which contributes a lot of money to national budget. Another new technologies should  be applied in energy sector. It is true that the overuse of fossil fuels currently results in serious pollution in our environment . By making green technology such as nuclear power become viable, this will alleviate our dependence on fossil fuel, thus improving air quality and public health.

In conclusion, in spite of some benefits of free education system, I still feel that technology applications is the best way to raise the standard of living in developing countries.