Some working parents believe childcare centres can provide best care for children, others think other family members like grandparents can do this job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that the parents often wonder whether they ought to provide children with care of daycare centers or not. While many people suppose that children receiving cares from their family members can be the best way to care for children, I would argue that institutional cares are much better.

On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why the parents have a tendency of choosing home-based care. Firstly, they may think that caring for youngsters in home satisfies the condition that is safe for their children. Those who can be grandparents receiving the responsibility of paying attention to children is likely to spend plenty of time for them. By this way, grandparents take care of all children's activities, which would lead to be less injuries or accidents. Furthermore, children could be easy to make close relationship with people who are member in their family. If individuals do not belong to their family, the young are probably unconfident, even scared.

On the other hand, I believe that the young are under the care of care services is beneficial in some ways. One major advantage is that they are often live in educated environment. This is because childcare centers usually hire skilled staffs who have abilities and skills enough to foster them. Another benefit is that children can be nurtured essential skills. Those centers often have sufficient facilities to provide them full of activities such as art, reading and plays. This allows children to push their imagination and learn vital skills such as collaborative and self-discipline skills.

In conclusion, although both nurturing youngsters in home and taking them to daycare centers are advantageous in their own ways, it seems to me that it is better to take care of children in daycare centers.

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It is true that the parents often wonder whether they ought to provide children with care of daycare centers or not. While many people suppose that children receiving cares from their family members (1) can be the best way to care for children --> woluld have the full development  of their talents , I would argue that institutional cares are much better.

On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why the parents have a tendency of choosing home-based care. Firstly, (2) they may think --> it is thought that caring for youngsters in home (3) satisfies the condition that is safe --> will be safe  for their children. (3) Those who can be grandparents receiving the responsibility of --> because the grandparents take more responsibility to pay attention to children than the kindergartens (4) is likely to spend plenty of time for them. By this way, grandparents can observe all activities of their children, which (5) would lead to be less helps prevent from having fewer injuries or accidents. Furthermore, children could be easy to (6) make close relationship have a close relationship with (7) people who are member in their family. all family members (8) If individuals do not belong to their family, the young are probably unconfident, even scared.. it is the love of the family that will help them feel more confident to enter the society.

On the other hand, I believe that the young (9) are under the care of care services is beneficial in some ways taken care of by childcare centres would get more benefits . One major advantage is that they(10) are often live in educated environment would live in educational environment.  This is because childcare centers usually hire skilled staffs who have (11) abilities and skills enough enough abilities and skills to foster them. Another benefit is that children can(12)  be nurtured develop their essential skills. Those centers often have sufficient facilities to (13)  provide them full of sever many activities such as art, reading and (14) plays other outdoor activities. This allows children to push their imagination and learn vital skills such as collaborative and self-discipline skills.

In conclusion, although both nurturing youngsters in home and taking them to daycare centers are advantageous in their own ways, it seems to me that it is better to take care of children in daycare centers.

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(9) under the care of đâu có sai gì

(11) mình thấy vẫn dùng skills enough to được chứ.

(12) nurture essential skills cũng native mà bạn