IELTS Task 1 - Giúp mình với ạ lần đầu mình làm dạng table.

Question

 The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

 

ANSWER:

The table compares six networks in terms of age, size and the numbers of people using underground railway in major cities.

From a general perspective. the oldest underground railway service provider is in London and also covers the longest rail route. Meanwhile, Los Angeles railway network is the latest having a small and fewer commuters using this service.

As is shown by the table, London railway system was established in 1863 and it is also one of the longest routes among these six cities (more than 700 million passengers). Besides, Paris railway station was opened in 1900 and had almost 200km route, but had far larger commuters than the London's one (1191 million per year). Again, Tokyo railway system has the most passenger (more than 1927 millions) and it was started in 1927 with a size of 155km route.

In contrast, three newer systems was Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles. It is clear that Los Angeles rail transit system is the newest opened in 2001 and it only had 28km route with 50 million commuters per year. On the other hand, Kyoto railway network is not only the smallest (11km route) but it also had the lest passengers (45 millions) among six cities. Whereas Washington DC railway system was opened in 1976 and had total distance of 126km with 144 million commuters.

Answer 1

The table compares six networks in terms of age, size and the numbers of people using underground railway in major cities.

From a general perspective, the oldest underground railway service provider is in London and also covers the longest rail route. Meanwhile, Los Angeles railway network is the latest having a small and fewer (KYOTO mới là thành phố ít nhất nhỉ?!!; với lại ở đây mình nên dùng fewest nhen - 2 đối tượng thì mới dùng SS hơn) commuters using this service.

As is shown by the table, London railway system was established in 1863 and it is also one of the longest routes among these six cities (more than 700 million passengers). Besides, Paris railway station was opened in 1900 and had almost 200km route, but had far larger commuters than the London's one (1191 million per year). Again, Tokyo railway system has the most passenger (more than 1927 millions) and it was started in 1927 with a size of 155km route.

In contrast, three newer systems was Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles. It is clear that Los Angeles rail transit system is the newest opened in 2001 and it only had 28km route with 50 million commuters per year. On the other hand, Kyoto railway network is not only the smallest (11km route) but it also had the lest passengers (45 millions) among six cities. Whereas (Whereas thì phải có 2 mệnh đề bạn ơi, câu này chưa hoàn chỉnh!!) Washington DC railway system was opened in 1976 and had total distance of 126km with 144 million commuters.

 

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Answer 2

Again, Tokyo railway system has (had) the most passenger (more than 1927 millions) and it was started in 1927 with a size of 155km route.