The internet has as many disadvantages as it does advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement.

Question

Nowadays, with modernization, the internet plays a significant role in the development of the world. However, there is a statement that the internet has as many drawbacks as it does benefits. In my opinion, I agree with the above view.
One the one hand, the internet supports people to improve productivity in working and studying. In fact, it provides access to much information for anything and it also has lots of software which helps us advertise, designing and keep in touch with other companies. Moreover, in daily life, everything becomes more easily by applying the internet. For example, people can buy food and services from the comfort of their home, so people have more time to do their work or relaxing.
On the other hand, the popularity of the internet makes lots of problems for the user. Especially those having children, parents find it difficult to control what their children see online. In other words, they do not always know who their children are chatting. Moreover, with so many websites it is difficult to search for good information and criminals increasingly use the internet to steal people's money. These make people spending time to select correct information and legal items
In conclusion, there are several disadvantages of using the internet but also the internet has made life so much easier in so many ways.

Answer 1

Mình nghĩ bài của bạn khá ổn nhưng mình nghĩ ở phần intro câu này:'' However, there is a statement that the internet has as many drawbacks as it does benefits.'' bạn nên đổi thành ''some people say that.....but other suggest that......" thì phần intro của bạn nhìn tốt hơn là paraphrase quá kĩ từng chữ. Mình không master lắm nên không thể chấm điểm cho bạn đuợc nha!