IELTS Task 2: Topic education: Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure.

Question

Nowadays, many students in higher education have to work their way through university instead of focusing on studying. It is worth noting that more and more people lack of time in the class and drops out of college when was faced with the pressure of formal exams. There are several reasons for this problem, and various measures could be taken by government and individuals to improve this situation.

The main issue is that tuition in university is getting higher and higher which make many people can not pay for studying program, thus, they have to work while studying. Another problem is that study program is quite boring with them, and that program is not also suitable as all thing they were expected, so, it was reason why some students felt behind with their studies. As a result, the munber of studens were in stressful and constantly feeling under pressure while formal examinations were coming.

Fortunately, several measures could be taken to prevent this problem from both individuals and goverment. The frst solution would be reduced fee of college or produce easy scholarships to uncourage many people can have higher knowledge when they do not have financial condition. Other hand, distance learning by a virtual classroom instead of face-to-face learning is trending for modern study method of people who lack of time in school. A second measure would be the lectures should sift unnecessary information when deliver a lecture, and increase attraction of subjects by extra-curricular activities. Because, interactive learning help transmission of knowledge better, and have a good grasp of information quickly.

In conclusion, it is clear that there is  various reasons for lacking time in university of students, and teps need to be taken to tackle these problems.

Answer 1

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Nowadays, many students in higher education have to work their way through university instead of focusing on studying. It is worth noting that more and more people lack of time in the class and drops out of college when was faced with the pressure of formal exams. There are several reasons for this problem, and various measures could be taken by the government and individuals to improve this situation.

The main issue is that tuition in university is getting higher and higher which make many people can not pay for studying program, thus, they have to work while studying. Another problem is that study program is quite boring with them, and that program is not also suitable as all thing they were expected, so, it was the reason why some students fell behind with their studies. As a result, the number of students were in stressful and constantly feeling under pressure while formal examinations were coming.

Fortunately, several measures could be taken to prevent this problem from both individuals and the government. The first solution would be reduced fees of college or produce easy scholarships to encourage many people can have higher knowledge when they do not have the financial conditions. Other hand, distance learning by a virtual classroom instead of face-to-face learning is trending for the modern study method of people who lack of time in school. A second measure would be the lectures should sift unnecessary information when delivering a lecture, and increase the attraction of subjects by extra-curricular activities. Because, interactive learning help transmission of knowledge better, and have a good grasp of information quickly.

In conclusion, it is clear that there are various reasons for lacking time in the university of students, and steps need to be taken to tackle these problems.

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