Some people think that planning for future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent agree/ disagree

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Nowadays, making perfect plan for the time ahead may be not cause people great anxieties. While some people suppose that it will be extremely time-consuming if they concern for future instead of living in present, I still agree with preparing early for the future.

There are various reasons that it is necessary for arranging specific plan. Personally, when drafting detail plan, they can comprehend themselves as well as their strengths and weaknesses, that they should spend more time to improve. In addition, I think that people who set their targets have opportunities to be more successful than people who do not specify the steps for the future. Therefore, everyone always want to have a well-paid job, a handsome salary or cooperate with large multinational corporations. To achieve these goals, they should know planning for the future is never redundant.

Some of them think that paying attention to the present is more vital. In my opinion, people should still live in present well, improve their skill from time to time and look after themselves. All is because they contribute to a gorgeous future.

In conclusion, people should not only concern at the moment, they must widen their view to future by making plan as soon as possible.

Answer 1

Mình thấy bài bạn triển khai ý hay và khá logic á nhưng còn vài chỗ mình nghĩ thế này chắc hợp lí hơn:

A perfect plan, a detail plan, a specific plan

May be-> maybe

mình thường thấy concern ABOUT THE future

THE present

everyone wantS

Thường thì must ( có tính ra lệnh ), các từ có tính chắc chắn cao như everyone, everybody, can nên được thay bằng

almost/nearly everyone. seemingly everyone..

can-> be able to, be highly possible

Chúc bạn mau tiến bộ nha.

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