People attend college or university for many different reasons. Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Question

To most of students who have just completed high school, universities or coleges are the next important target to pursue. From my point of view, there are numerous reasons why people want to attend university.

 First of all, pupils desire the best chances to get a good job. It is undeniable that big and famous companies often require expert and proficient staffs. And a degree or certification, which proves owner's ability, of course offers more oppotunities. the higher level of understandings you have, the higher quality of the job you can get. Secondly, students will gain more experiences. Participating in college means that we are coming in for a different circumstance. By dealing with the realistic problems, people can enhace their own soft skills and obtain acquaintance with practicable troubles in the future. Last but not least, that under graduates follow higher education is to want to improve their knowledge. Academies especially reputable ones always contain standard lecturers with specialized education systems. Students will be given intensive lessons during college course.

 In conclusion, three reasons above are the most fundermantal and common motivations for people who want to pass into university.In my opinion, it is essential for under graduate to join a university for better future life. (209 words)

Answer 1

1. You wrote: To most of students who have just completed high school, un...

Feedback: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ("most of the students") or simply say "most students".

Error type: Article not needed error

Suggestion: most of the students, most students

 

2. You wrote: ... completed high school, universities or coleges are the next important target to pursue...

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Suggestion: colleges

 

3. You wrote: ...a degree or certification, which proves owner's ability, of course offers more oppotu...

Feedback: An article is missing before this countable noun. Use a plural form "owners" or add an article to the singular form. "an owner", "the owner".

Error type: Article and uncountable noun error

Suggestion: owners, an owner, the owner

 

4. You wrote: ... owner's ability, of course offers more oppotunities. the higher level of understandings you...

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Suggestion: opportunities

6. You wrote: ...of course offers more oppotunities. the higher level of understandings you have, the h...

Feedback: Use a superlative. Check it: "the highest".

Error type: Adjective form error

Suggestion: the highest

 

7. You wrote: ...r level of understandings you have, the higher quality of the job you can get. Secondl...

Feedback: Use a superlative. Check it: "the highest".

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Suggestion: the highest

 

8. You wrote: ...with the realistic problems, people can enhace their own soft skills and obtain acquai...

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Suggestion: enhance

 

9. You wrote: ...usion, three reasons above are the most fundermantal and common motivations for people who w...

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Suggestion: fundamental