Ielts task2: It is said that countries should produce all food for their population to eat and import as little as possible. Do you agree or disagree?

Question

It is sometimes argued that providing all kinds of food for citizens and reducing importing food as much as possible are the countries’ responsibility. However, I totally disagree with this idea, and I believe that this is a significant deterrent to countries’ development.

On the one hand, it is simply impossible for a nation to produce all food for their citizens. Obviously, there are a variety of plants that just grow up on some particular areas. For example, wet rice is just planted in Asian countries or Brazil where there are many rivers, lakes that can supply water resources for its growth, and of course it would find it difficult to adapt severe climate in Africa in which even people are dying every year due to a scarcity of fresh water. Therefore, this is the best demonstration for governments to import necessary foods to meet their citizens’ demands.

In addition, there are several reasons for authorities to decide to import food. Firstly, importing food is considered as the most effective way to diversify the number of goods on the countries’ domestic markets. This will lead to various choices for consumers, and certainly encourages a well-being life for people. Secondly, many foreign products mean that domestic markets will be really competitive that will force local manufacturers to improve their production practices to compete with others. As the result, customers will benefits from numerous high-quality goods on the markets.

In conclusion, producing all food for its citizens is an impossible duty for a country’s agriculture industry. In my opinion, importing food should be encouraged because of many significant benefits it brings to countries’ citizens.

Answer 1

just planted mình nghĩ chữ just đó sai đó bạn, theo mình nên thêm properly, hay efficiently hay fruitfully,

scarity mình nghĩ k nên có mạo từ.
Và mình thắc mắc hình như on the one hand phải có đối lại là on the other hand mới được. Dạng như không take side.

"This will lead to various choices for consumers" tại sao k dùng offer hay cater for thay vì "lead"?

ở coda, không nên bắt đầu ý bằng v-ing. Kết luận chưa hay á bạn, chưa tổng hợp lại ý được, ít nhất nói rõ hơn một tí thay vì nói nó có nhiều lợi ích. Và sẽ rất hay nếu bạn dám đề xuất một ý tưởng.

Comments

"is just planted" có thể chỉnh thành "can only be planted".
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đoạn kết hơn cụt và thiếu liền mạch

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thông thường đã on the one hand thì fair dcos on the other hand chứ bạn