Đề IELTS của giám khảo Simon. Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do u agree or disagree [closed]

Question

In the modern age, Internet is suprisingly developing so reading news on the Internet is graduatelly becoming tendency. However, I still believe that the traditional press is the most vital source of news nowadays.

       First of all, newspapers appeared many years ago and they became indispensably mental food of Vietnamese. When the Internet explodes, almost people tend to read news or find informations on their smart phones because of convenience of them. however, a part of people in the world prefer newspapers to online news and they suppose that drinking coffee with a newspaper in the early morning is their cup of tea. This habit helps them let their hair down or feel more happy and peaceful to start a new day.

      Second, newspapers contain completely accurate informations more than every news on the Internet. Day by day, thousand of news on the Internet are posted on the newfeed in order to make money by bad people. Therefore, newspapers are the source which people look for and use them as an authenticated informations. For example, according to a recent survey, Ministry of Informations and Communications showed that 37% people in VietNam still read newspapers instead of online news beacause they thought that online news are unknown source and too risky to access them.

      In conclusion, in the internet age, tradtional media, especially traditional press still exists. Therefore, i agree with the view that newspapers will remain as a main source of informations due to advantages of them brings for mankind.

Answer 1

Mình ko đồng ý với kiểu viết thiên về một hướng Agree hay ko. Như bài của bạn 2 Body mình sẽ ko nhận xét nhiều về ý vì triển khai 6-7 câu một ý là cực khó. Chỉ góp ý về lỗi ngữ pháp hoặc từ vựng mà mình thấy.

In the modern age, Internet is suprisingly developing so reading news on the Internet is graduatelly becoming tendency reading online news has become increasingly popular among youngsters and it seems that newspaper has lost many readers. However, I still believe that the traditional newspaper press is the most is still a vital resource of news/ still plays a vital role in providing news vital source of news nowadays.

 

First of all, newspapers appeared many years ago and they became indispensably mental food of Vietnamese (không dùng các thông tin nền mà đi thẳng vào luận điểm). When the Internet explodes, almost it is true that people tend to read news or find informations on with/ using their smart phones because of its convenience of them (đọc câu này tưởng đang ủng hộ online news, đọc sang câu sau lại ko phải). however, a part of people in the world prefer newspapers to online news and they suppose that drinking coffee with a newspaper in the early morning is their cup of tea. This habit helps them let their hair down or feel more happy and peaceful to start a new day.

Với 2 câu cuối của đoạn trên bạn nên nghĩ đến một ý ngắn khoảng 2-3 từ ví dụ a daily habit, etc. Sau đấy mới triển khai 2-3 ý bổ sung vào, cần phải show ra ngay trong câu đầu tiên.

Secondly, newspapers contain completely accurate informations more than every news on the Internet. Day by day, thousand of news on the Internet are posted on the newfeed in order to make money by bad people. Therefore, newspapers are the source which people look for and use them as an authenticated informations. For example, according to a recent survey, Ministry of Informations and Communications showed that 37% people in VietNam still read newspapers instead of online news beacause they thought that online news are unknown source and too risky to access them.

Mình nghĩ bạn chuyển thành ý đáng tin cậy vì có sự kiểm định chất lượng, sự giám sát của các cơ quan báo chí, etc. Nên sẽ hạn chế được leading information hay fake news.

In conclusion, in the internet age, tradtional media, especially traditional press still exists. Therefore, i agree with the view it seems to me that traditional newspapers will remain as a main source of informations due to advantages of them brings for mankind thanks to A and B/ because I think that ... (chỗ này phải có argument nào đó chung chung hơn A và B).

Comments

hic, cảm ơn góp ý nhiệt tình của thầy. Thỉnh thoảng thầy ghé qua góp ý cho sinh viên tụi em. Chứ giờ đi học ngoài nhưng giáo viên cũng k có tâm lắm đâu ạ :((

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Làm lại bài viết trên: ( mong mọi người góp ý ạ)

      In modern age, online news graduately replaces traditional ones o it seems that newspapers has lost many readers. However, i personally believe that the traditional press still plays a vital role in people nowadays.

      On the one hand, it is an indisputable fact that online news brings significantly benefits to people. Firstly, with suprising speed, information can be accessed at the click of a button. For example, people want to read news, they just need to have a smart phone which is logged in Internet, they can read whatever they want in whenever they like. Secondly, when they completely read news, they can comment, share or communicate on the articles with each readers over the world. It is a revolutionization of high-tech age. Finally, this source of news is less damaging to the environment because of not using paper as a material to produce.

     Nevertheless, newspapers will continue to be an important key of information, even in the Internet age. The main reason is that newspapers are the most tradiontional means of communicating the news, and not everyone can be able to use mobile phones to read instead. For instance, people who live in rural areas can not have oppotunity to use smart phone to get online because there are not Internet at there. Equally importantly, newspapers are reliable and trusted more than online news since they are come out by professional jounalists and editors. Last bu not least, more people prefer holding a newspaper to looking at the phone's screen.

      In conclusion, i still believe that although Internet is spreading over the world and more people tend to read online news, the traditional press is the main source of news for human.

 

 

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