IELTS Task 2 17/8- Family roots or present and future generationsto focus

Question

In many parts of the world, people search for family history. Some people think that finding for the previous generations is a thing to do, but others think that it is better to be focus on present and future generations. Discuss both views and show your opinion

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Although in some parts of the world, people think that finding the family roots is necessary , there are still many people think that looking forward into the present and future generations is what we better do. Personally, I think that we should balance both ways: focus on the present and future generations but not ignore the past.

Apparently, gratefulness is a good manner that everyone should have. Finding for the family roots is to show our respect and thankfulness to our ancestors and those people had given us our lives, raised and taken care of us mentally and physically. Keep searching for family history is also a way to tribute to our previous generations as well as to protect the family identities. By that,  following generations would be able to  know their roots and the best of family heritage in order to learn from and carry on the good traditions. Therefore, searching for family history is obviously a thing to do.

On the other hand, it is no doubt that present and future generations are in need of attention. If we too much focus on the past, we loose our lives which is going on or we might neglect what children are looking for from us. Thus, spending our time and resources on children is crucial. They need not only a material things but also our time and nurture. Present generations are the fundamental for the future ones. Therefore, stay fully with the present is to live mindfully and meaningfully to build up the future generations responsibly.

In conclusion, in many parts of the world people are searching for the family history and it is a good thing to do. However, I think focus on the present and future generations is also significant importance.

Answer 1

2. You wrote: ...into the present and future generations is what we better do. Personally, I think ...

Feedback: Conjugate your verb for the third person plural: "future generations are". (Non3rdPers 001)

Error type: Verb agreement error

Suggestion: future generations are

 

3. You wrote: ...ould have. Finding for the family roots is to show our respect and thankfulness to...

Feedback: If your subject "the family roots" is plural, you need a third person plural verb "are". (va100)

Error type: Verb agreement error

Suggestion: are

 

4. You wrote: ... to our previous generations as well as to protect the family identities. By that, follow...

Feedback: **You cannot use an infinitive form after a preposition. Use a gerund instead. Did you mean "well as protecting"?

Error type: Verb form error

Suggestion: well as protecting

 

5. You wrote: ... On the other hand, it is no doubt that present and future generations are in need of a...

Feedback: Your subject (doubt) is singular, but you have used a verb conjugated for a plural subject. Conjugate your verb for the third person singular present "doubt that presents".

Error type: Verb agreement error

Suggestion: doubt that presents

 

6. You wrote: ...n. If we too much focus on the past, we loose our lives which is going on or we might...

Feedback: Did you mean "lose" (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?

Error type: Commonly confused words

Suggestion: lose

 

7. You wrote: ...past, we loose our lives which is going on or we might neglect what children are look...

Feedback: Use a comma before "or" if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).

Error type: Punctuation error

Suggestion: on, or

 

8. You wrote: ...ding our time and resources on children is crucial. They need not only a material ...

Feedback: The noun "resources" is plural, so your verb should be conjugated for a plural subject. Revise: "resources on children are".

Error type: Verb agreement error

Suggestion: resources on children are

 

9. You wrote: ... crucial. They need not only a material things but also our time and nurture. Present ...

Feedback: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a material thing" or simply the plural without the article "material things"?

Error type: Article error

Suggestion: a material thing, material things

 

10. You wrote: ...s on the present and future generations is also significant importance.

Feedback: Conjugate your verb for the third person plural: "future generations are". (Non3rdPers 001)

Error type: Verb agreement error

Suggestion: future generations are