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Writing task 1

The charts below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2000 and 2010, with projected sales for 2020.

Summarize the inforamation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.

The bar chart compares the figure for magazines sold per person between five nations in 2000 and 2010 with sale expected for 2020.

It is clear that, the number of magazines sold in the country B was highest and country E was the lowest. While three of five contries were in an down ward trend, country D was in the opposite trend and country E witnessed a fluctuation during the period.

We can see that, although there was a decrease in 2010 compared with 10 years ago, from 50 magazines to 47 magazines per person, the numbers sold of country B was always the highest. It's also guessed to rank the first position in 2020 at about 46 magazines per one. Turn to country A, between 2000 and 2010, the reduction is similar with the previous country, from about 48 to 45 magazines per person, but this country also predicted a significant decline in 2020 (about only 38 magazines per person).

The figure of country D was in an upward trend. Although the consumption was not high but it had a slight rise within 10 years, from 18 vol to 20 vol per person and the forecast said that it will keep increase to 23 vol in 2020.

Especially, the consumption of country E had a fluctuation, it increased from 7 vol to 9 vol over 10 years but it may decline in 2020.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

was highest => was the highest

down ward trend =>  downward trend

keep increase to 23 vol in 2020 => keep increasing to 23 vol in 2020.

Answer 2

1/While three of five contries were in an down ward trend, country D was in the opposite trend and country E witnessed a fluctuation during the period.

-Câu này sai chủ ngữ sẽ bị trừ điểm rất nặng=> chủ ngữ phải là the number of the magazines of ...

-the opposite was true for country D sẽ hay hơn

2/We can see that, although there was a decrease in 2010 compared with 10 years ago, from 50 magazines to 47 magazines per person, the numbers sold of country B was always the highest

- câu này sai ngữ pháp => sửa thay , = and

3/ Bài này body 1 and body 2 không đều unbalanced.