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Although the agreement is that younger children should go to an elementary school; some opponents suppose that they could begin their education at school if they are teenagers. I believe that children attend school beforehand might be beneficial in some ways. The next, I am going to analyze both points of view.

 

     Some people recommend that instead of full-time studying at school, children should spend more time to play games or other physical activities. First, children could have childhood avoiding education pressure. In fact, kids not only have a hard day of study with calculations and writing tests but also parents expect them to acquire excellent marks. This is one of the reasons why children nurse negative feelings if they have to attend schools too soon.

By contrast, at school, children’s awareness becomes to be independent sooner. Actually, children need their parents for most physical and mental requirements such as eating, drinking, playing, sleeping and even defecating. Thus, when they are separated from their parents, they have to solve these troubles on their own. Furthermore, the more schools educate children early, the more the schooling is effective. According to some researches point, brains of kids develop continuously during the first years. Therefore, when the school teaches calculations or languages, most children could comprehend easier as younger.

In conclusion, I suggest that parents should encourage their kids to study at school early because schools can create a natural environment as well as essential conditions for children’s development.(256 words)

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Education has long been considered as one of the necessary sectors for children can develop on the right track. However, nowadays, it has the agreement that younger children should go to an elementary school while some opponents suppose that they could begin their education at school if they are teenagers. This essay will analyze these views in depth and give my opinion.

The first view is right in some extents because various people recommend that instead of full-time studying at school, children should spend more time to play games or other physical activities. Firstly, children should have childhood avoiding pressure from education. In fact, today, kids seem to confront with a lot of stress due to their parent expectation. Therefore, children make friend with calculations and writing tests day by day to take excellent marks, which will satisfy their parents. It is inevitable that why children nurse negative feelings and lead to autism if they attend schools too soon. Moreover, children may lack care the life around them and become more introverted. When kids have much homework and do not have sufficient free time to take part in other activities such as communicating with their friend, watching film or doing what interesting tasks make them excited. It is possible that kids cannot develop the both sides mentally and physically even lose their childhood.

As regard the second view, it is convincing in some sense. First of all, at school, children’s awareness becomes to be independent sooner. Actually, a variety of children appear to need their parents for most physical and mental requirements such as eating, drinking even defecating. Thus, when they are separated from their parents, they have to solve these troubles by their own. Furthermore, the more schools educate children early, the more the schooling is effective. According to some researches point, brains of kids develop continuously during the first years. Therefore, when the school teaches calculations or languages, most children could comprehend easier as younger. For example, in some developed countries, parents are encouraged to support their kids to learn different languages which help to develop their children’s brain efficiently.

In conclusion, numerous people think that kids should go to school when they have young age, but some those suppose that children should not attend school until they get enough mature, these views may have its own right meaningful. However, I suggest that parents should encourage their kids to study at school early because schools can create a natural environment as well as essential conditions for children’s development.

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