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Hello everyone! My name's Jenny.Iwould like to visit to Japan It' located near where I live,so I'd would like to visit Japan. There are many reasons that I would like to visit Janpan . The first,in Japan, it has lots of places to visit like Tokyo and in this place have lots of restaurants with lots of foods very delicious as the people can come to and eat. The second,we can go to Japan to see some famous people. And we can go to the concert listen to the singer. In the future, I hope I can visit Japan one time in my life.
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