Bài IELTS Task 2 thi ngày 23.01.2016 - newspaper and online news
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Đề bài: Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today, with the proliferation of the Internet, people tend to read online news more regularly than before. Besides, some people believe that traditional newspaper still plays an essential role. Personally, I completely disagree with that opinion for a number of reasons.

On the one hand, the reason why conventional newspapers become any longer popular due to the speed of updating. Newspapers take time for different processes of editing, printing and distributing. This will cause newspapers fail to meet the instant quest for news of modern readers. Meanwhile, online news is constantly updated. With the advent of technology especially the Internet, online websites provide latest information, some online news is broadcasted as the livestream over the Internet. Take BBC or CNN for examples. A number of international events such as breaking news or president elections are lively reported on those channels.

On the other hand, people are likely to read online news with ease. Online news allows readers to seek information on the Internet everywhere just with devices connected WiFi. For instance, when people are sitting in a café and have requirement for reading news, they can surf the Internet to read online news by their mobile phones or computers. In contrast, with traditional newspapers, people have to go to newsstands in order to buy a newspapers. Sometimes newspapers may be out of stock because they are distributed in each batch. Thus, online news is more suitable and convenient than newspapers.

In conclusion, despite the fact that printed newspapers are still regarded as necessary source, I firmly asserted online news’ role in modern life greatly outweighs newspapers in various aspects.  

 

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Mình góp ý xíu nha!

Today, with the proliferation of the Internet, people tend to read online news more regularly than before. Besides => mình nghĩ dùng besides ở đây không đúng, nên dùng however, besides mang nghĩ bổ dung thêm lí do ý, xem video của Dan hauer để hiểu thêm nha

I completely disagree with that opinion for a number of reasons. => bạn nên nêu rõ ý kiến

online news is broadcasted as the livestream over the Internet => on the Internet

On the one hand với On the other hand chỉ dùng khi bạn phân tích 2 mặt lợi và hại thôi nha

còn nếu,đồng ý hoàn toàn thì nên dùng Firstly Secondly gì đó. 

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cảm ơn góp ý của bạn nha ^^

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