By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers.
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In recent years, there has been a vast increase in the number of people committing manslaughter. It is a widespread belief that people who commit murders should be punished by death penalty. However, some claim that death penalty should be eradicated and life imprisonment assumes its place. From my perspectives, I am of the opposite opinion to the latter one due to the following reasons. 


First of all, a life sentence appears to be an inappropriate solution as it too lenient a punishment for such a heinous crime as murder. In addition, there is a school of thought that keeping prisoners alive and behind bars for the rest of their existence is a waste of tax payers’ money. Furthermore, when those offenders are put in the same cells, studies show that it gives rise to more crimes as they are likely to plot another murder together. As a result, life in prison does not serve as an effective way to address killing crime. 


On the flip side, capital punishment is more useful than imprisonment due to its possibility to deterring crimes. Making penalty extremely harsh could either generate a sense of fear among people or send a warning message to whoever may think about committing crimes. Therefore, the main aim of death penalty might be achieved by reducing crime rates, especially manslaughter which have bad results without sufficient compensate. Additionally, a human body is a unique private property and if somebody destroys it, he or she should be treated to a similar degree. Due to this punishing death penalty to murderers should not make the society guilty as it is a deserving sentence for those who commit such a serious crime. 


However, there are several cases that the capital punishment should not be applied to; for instance, a man or woman accidentally kills another to save himself or herself. In case of the premeditated murder, the reason should be considered before announcing the death penalty, Even if a single innocent person gets the capital punishment, that will make the judicial system questionable.


In short, people need to be aware of the responsibilities for their actions and the following outcomes. Punishing murderers with the death penalty is one of the solutions the society uses to ensure the safety of its people while helping them realise of the consequences of their actions.

 
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Mở bài: manslaughter là ngộ sát, nó không thể thay thế cho murder được nhé , assume => should take the place of deal penalty. I am of the opposite oppinion of the latter one => I am in favor of the former due to ...(để đỡ dài dòng phúc tạp) 

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- Đoạn 1: as it too lenient a punishment for such a heinous crime as murder => it IS too lenient to tackle such a henious crime as...studies show that it gives rise to more crimes as they are likely to plot another murder together => nếu không chỉ rõ được là studies nào, và trích được nguồn ra thì tốt nhất không nên nói vào đây là studies show that để đảm bảo tính chính xác của bài luận. có thể sửa thành it can be seen that....

- đoạn 2: due to its possibility to deterring crime => to deter . making penalty extremely harsh => carrying extremely harsh penalty (để tránh dùng từ make_ k academic). which have bad results without sufficient compensate => compensation. tương tự để tránh dùng từ make ở câu cuối của đoạn make the society guilty as => give the whole community a burden of guilt. 

- Đoạn 3: sau for instance hay for example, nếu bạn trích 1 danh động từ hay danh từ thì có thể dùng dấu phẩy, nhưng nếu sau 2 từ này là 1 mệnh đề/ câu hoàn chỉnh thì phải tách thành câu riêng. có thể diễn đạt : accidentally kills another to save himself or hersefl có thể viết thành: kills another in self-defence. để k dùng từ make, bạn có thể viết là: the judicial system may become questionable. 

=> Nhìn chung bài của bạn có cấu trúc rõ ràng, lập luận khá thuyết phục và từ vựng tốt, tuy nhiên cần kiểm tra ngũ pháp cẩn thận hơn và nên tra cách dùng 1 từ mới cẩn thận trước khi viết =)))

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